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Spine Grinder
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Standing In Silence...

0 posted 2001-10-24 04:35 PM


i know its not my best but i needed 2 get it out


angel, angel,
don't break my heart.
don't say goodbye,
to let me fall apart.

don’t choose her over me,
don’t let me here to rot and bleed.
don't leave me here with all this pain,
don't take the bus or the train.

just stay here with me,
in this humble place.
with our hearts beating in rhythm,
but try not to hurry, love’s not a race.

Did u ever have the feeling that he meant everything 2 u, yet u meant nothing 2 him?.....~me
~...I can be ur hero baby, I can kiss the pain away...~

© Copyright 2001 Staci Weidner - All Rights Reserved
LoneWolf
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1 posted 2001-10-24 05:16 PM


i liked this one, i could relate to it, good job

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.
I've learned that even when you th

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2 posted 2001-10-24 05:59 PM


Even if you think it's not your best, I like it. I like the expression in here! Good job!

It takes more work to love myself than to love others... I guess that explains it, eh?

Gentle Spirit
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3 posted 2001-10-24 08:49 PM


just stay here with me,
in this humble place.
with our hearts beating in rhythm,
but try not to hurry, love’s not a race.

Even if you dont want to admit it, you have a lil more wisdom than you think you do!!  You've got the right idea hon, perhaps just the wrong person to share it with?  Take your own advice sweetie,
LOVES NOT A RACE!!!  Only time, patience, and a true heart make love real.  Sorry Stac, didn't mean to ramble.  I just got a few years on ya, and I would save you learning the hard way, the way that I did.  We all must learn from our own mistakes, but hey, I can still ramble.  LOL!!  Hugs sweet neice.

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

(I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth)

peachesNcream
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Ocean Of Tears
4 posted 2001-10-25 08:49 PM


heylo! good poem..very sad. i know exactly how you feel. let things juss go along and it will turn out ok. you know im here to talk to ya when u need me!!! ~Jess

~*~How can we be friends if everytime I think of you I know that's all we'll ever be~*~

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tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs
5 posted 2001-10-26 01:44 PM


Its good to get feelings out...it helps. I enjoyed the poem..i think you expressed yourself nicely...nice job and im sorry about whats going on..hope things get better

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

Spine Grinder
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Standing In Silence...
6 posted 2001-10-26 03:47 PM


thanks 4 all the replies, they were appreciated.

Did u ever have the feeling that he meant everything 2 u, yet u meant nothing 2 him?.....~me
~...I can be ur hero baby, I can kiss the pain away...~

anonymousfemale
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7 posted 2001-10-27 12:58 PM


Thoughts lik this are better out than in so you've done a good job regardless of your opinion on it.  
Love is a pain in the ass but without the trials and tribulations of our hearts, we would be lost.

Thanks for sharing.

~AF~

Maybe I'm just a girl...interrupted.

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