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just_me
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since 2001-10-24
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0 posted 2001-10-24 02:13 AM


this is my first time writingm so I am not real good. let me know what you think, cause i know it needs a lot of help.

Here goes nothing...

ominoes used to be my favorite game
lining them up and watching them fall
Giggling and setting them up again
Just to watch them fall like a crumbling wall

As I look back, those times were great
Having no cares and not worrying about life ahead.
Never realizing how much life is like dominoes
And see what you will soon come to dread

There comes a point in your life
When you realize you are the cause
Of life's little "dominoes"
But not in a way you would want to applause

You realize you are responsible
For your own set of pieces
And when they fall picking them up
is like feeling continuity as it ceases

Being responsible for all those around you
Is a major task some wish not to take
Because when you do and you fail
Its not just your life that is at stake




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1 posted 2001-10-24 09:10 AM


Welcome! Great message in your first post! I think you did just fine   Please check your email for a special greeting!   ~SEA
CwboyAtHeart
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2 posted 2001-10-24 01:12 PM


Wow...  I REALLY liked this one, thought it was an awesome first post.  Really makes you think about life and your role in everything around you...  Great Job!!!!

      - Cody -

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3 posted 2001-10-24 01:48 PM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!!!!

This definately remind me of childhood..ahh..the good old days!!! Its nice to have you join us and i hope you enjoy it here....welcome and i cant wait to read more from you!

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

Missthang
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4 posted 2001-10-24 02:07 PM


UNBELIVABLE girly!!!!! you have got somthing i like to call skills :-) well did the writing help? i knew it would. goo goo goo goo goo job!

-adamma

*The heart is a house for love*

Knight of Secrecy
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5 posted 2001-10-24 02:12 PM


Very nice first post, you'll like it here
Keep writing

-C.M.


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6 posted 2001-10-24 05:36 PM


Hhmmm... I love the way you did this one! Love the message!

WELCOME TO PIP!!!  

It takes more work to love myself than to love others... I guess that explains it, eh?

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7 posted 2001-10-25 04:25 AM


Welcome to passions, and I love your entrance!! well done!

Charisma

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