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K. Rebel
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0 posted 2001-10-23 10:35 PM


During the simpleness of night
I bore between feelings,
Strange feelings I rarely understand,
Feelings that attract me and drown me,
Feelings of loss.

Then I think of you,
And I find myself between another feeling,
A red and joyful feeling,
A feeling that attracts me and loves me,
A feeling never forgotten.

A pleasure full of heat,
I feel when I think of you,
That opens my soul and makes me happy,
That relaxes my mind,
Calms me and brings me joy.

I shall not hide my love for you,
For it is a feeling that changes my life,
Hides me in your innocence,
Brings me pleasure and makes me happy.



© Copyright 2001 Danny Brown - All Rights Reserved
cherish
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1 posted 2001-10-23 10:37 PM


A pleasure full of heat,

loved that line danny...can tell youre in love ...sweet.. ...good poem!


         

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2 posted 2001-10-23 11:29 PM


aaww, that's so sweet and well-written!

It takes more work to love myself than to love others... I guess that explains it, eh?

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3 posted 2001-10-24 07:51 AM


amazing the things love can do eh?? great job...i enjoyed this piece!!!

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

Knight of Secrecy
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4 posted 2001-10-24 10:07 AM


Let me gues Daniel, Marilyn?

lol
nice poem,
keep it up

-C.M.

K. Rebel
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5 posted 2001-10-24 04:42 PM


Of course Carlos!!!

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