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fozzyozzy
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since 2001-03-15
Posts 336
Lessburg Virginia

0 posted 2001-10-21 01:28 AM


Underneath the Thinnest

He sank in
    a pool
cold  on his skin
warm    in his soul

    his mind
  was a shade of frustration and pleasure
twisting what could be called remnants
memories of all the stupid happy times he had
  and their antithesis
Something that could be called depression


On that January morn he sank
and stayed in
      a pool topped with the thinnest layer of ice
you never would see
floating and flying
   tapping and singing
against the covering of marble crimson and blue
was the most beautious thing
you never would see
with the hazy fog rushing off the pool of blue and
red
the storm just breaking in a faraway photograph
crushing the sun's light into paper thin swords...
and above the sky,
was the thinnest layer of clouds

you would never see

"and Death i think is no paranthesis"-e.e. cummings

© Copyright 2001 Sean Michael DeFlora - All Rights Reserved
pharon
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since 1999-11-13
Posts 251
alabama
1 posted 2001-10-21 04:38 PM


you are one of the few people that can actually make me have a loss for words...once again you've posted an amazing poem..another addition to my library thingy..

               me

Missthang
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since 2001-07-03
Posts 103

2 posted 2001-10-21 06:03 PM


WOW! that's about all i can say. you are amazing with words and i wish i could write like you. i literally "felt" this poem, it gave me chills. you are an awesome writer. i look forward to reading more of yours.
chasing rain
Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737
Canada
3 posted 2001-10-21 06:39 PM


Wow, Sean...incredible. You left me breathless until the very end.
Like Pharon said...you also left me speechless...
You should be extremely pleased with this one (that's why it's going into me library)! Until your next post.  

++ Leah ++

Va pensiero sull' ali dorate...

stace_co2003
Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497
In a dream world
4 posted 2001-10-21 07:10 PM


okay, to be completly honest with you...I didn't understand some of it...but other than that, it was AWESOME, you really took my breath away..till I started getting confused. maybe it's the medicine I took..
anywya, thanks for sharing  

~*~I'm in love with a man named ZU~*~ *huggles Krissy*

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