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Allysa
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In an upside-down garden

0 posted 2002-05-23 10:03 AM


I catch your gaze
as you glance at me
across the table in the cafe
where we're drinking tea
with friends.

It seems that everytime
I glance up
you're looking over at me
with your blue eyes
giving me chills.

Your eyes
capture me
until I find myself
holding my breath.

I rest my head
lightly on your shoulder
and you take me hand
whispering something
sweetly in my ear.

It seems that everytime
I'm with you
I loose my mind
as you look at me
with your blue eyes.

Your eyes
capture me
until I find myself
holding my breath.

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tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs
1 posted 2002-05-23 10:15 AM


I liked the format and the flow of it. I think you did a great job on this poem. Isnt it such a great feeling?? Thanks for sharing!

iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf..

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2 posted 2002-05-24 12:20 PM


This is the complete oppostie of the other poem of yours that I just read.  Seems like someone is really happy in this one
thanks for sharing

là où est mon amour?
donde está mi amour?
wo ist meine Liebe?
Nelly Furtado é a menina a mais bonita no mundo largo do todo.


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singapore
3 posted 2002-05-26 10:33 AM


tender moments succinctly captured..thank you for sharing..
Mon Cherie
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Land of Never-ending Summers
4 posted 2002-05-26 12:01 PM


Wow, this is truly romantic!
But don't hold your breath too long! You may turn blue then you won't know which is bluer... His eyes, or your face...

_,,,^.^,,,_
Florence

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