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I actually wrote again =) |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
You and your friendship caused only of anger and despair. Why do you even dare to cross on infallible verity? That of which is the embodiment of such pathetic pretense. A foundation laid on the grounds of self indulgence. You are nothing but the dirt beneath my feet. Such cowardice that only insults that of every meaning A plague on you and that of who or what you are Worldly beast of such uncanny fraudulence I banish you from this of which is my own I am no longer a slave to that of which you represent Pitiful excuse to that of life and love’s true meaning Go on and forever hide in that cave of which you call home. I shan’t be flustered by remarks of unfounded words Words coming directly from such outward insignificance I shan’t be kept from that of things that I can conclude Conclude that to realize greatness in my own true destiny I know it's not good at all, but hey, I'm just happy that I was able to write something again.  là où est mon amour? |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Excellent Acire! What an incredibly powerful piece ... you've captured such strength and inspiration to carry on toward our own destinies. A very compelling write, much enjoyed! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Wooo... look at acire talkin' trash. lol kidding  ------------------- I shan’t be kept from that of things that I can conclude Conclude that to realize greatness in my own true destiny ------------------- That part above was of MUCH coolness. I really liked this poem a lot. Way to break the chains..  There are always answers as long as you're open enough to accept the answers you were not looking for. |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Wow, big words  Very powerful, and... yeah. I just liked it. Way to post again!If you define cowardice as running away, tripping and screaming at the first sign of danger, then yes, Mister Brave Man, I guess I am a coward. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Acies, this is awesome.....I mean truly kickin, rockin awesome. Excellent writing from you, definately hope you write more!! |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Okay...I know I said I wasn't going to reply till next week when I got back...BUT! How about a lil quicky...Just to let you know I read it and LOVED it... So ya...Here it goes...*Ahem* WOW!  MY FAVORITE type of poem...PIssed off ones...LOL This was INCREDIBLE! 3rd Stanza was my absolute fav. of all...There was so much strength in it.. You are so awesome man...Wow... *Hands you the bad arse award* MORE! MORE I say! By God, Get mad more often! LOL Cause it makes for some wicked writing! Every now and then I like to stick my foot in my mouth... |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Woo Hooo!! Kick their butts man!! It's great to see you writing again..it seemed as if there was a lot of emotion in this...! Nice one "I want love on my own terms; after everything I've ever learned. Me, I carry too much baggage..." |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
i *almost* didnt see this one..good thing i did. this was awesome, wonder who this is about..hopefully this one person i ahve in mind we'll talk later heh glad you can write again..writers block sucks*dq **You can't always trust the people you want to** |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
hi sweets  là où est mon amour? |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
you mean she gets a kiss and I don't?!  |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
Hey Acire! Well, this isn't your BEST, but it's still way better than any poem I have ever been able to produce I like your mushy ones better *L* hahabye dear!!  ,Sara "A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep." |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
talk about a "youbetterlistentomeori'llkillyou?" VERY powerful and quite angry piece...never knew you had a side to be felt for another. either way love or angry, GREAT job...i enjoyed the piece and hope to see more to come. "This little light of mine...im gonna let it shine. *sighs* Let it shine...let it shine. Let it shine." |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
ick..one thing..why do you write "OF which" all the time? it made it a bit weird. yes i agree with you acire- not your best no. but still very very good! i enjoyed it very much.. f t e |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Glad you found your muse. Enjoyed the read Charisma |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
haha Cherish, you are very keen i thought no one would notice là où est mon amour? |
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Knight of Secrecy Member
since 2001-10-12
Posts 113San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Very nice poem, way deep -CM. |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
This was very good Acire. I liked it beaucoup. Its nice to see your writing again. Well I hope all is well. Keep writing. REgina |
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just_me Junior Member
since 2001-10-24
Posts 19 |
i like the emotion... very well done! |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
yay acire!!!!!!!!!!! well done ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL |
hey i thought this was really good, i liked it a lot. It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. |
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Alyssa
since 2001-05-30
Posts 385IM ENGAGED!!!!! |
it absolutly SUCKS i hate this piece so much it STINKS  naaaa im kiddin man i really do like it im jealous "If I made you mad today, would you still love me tomorrow?"-Incubus |
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