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Teen Poetry #5

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Ender
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since 1999-12-08

Posts 200
Yuma, AZ USA

0 posted 2001-10-17 08:35 PM

Up, Down
My life comes around
Through and through
My love for you
High, low
You have made this so
Together, forever
And I thought never

***i'm in a weird mood tonite...so the past two posts by me are not my normal style of poetry writing...so if u r a "fan" of my normal poetry, please do not fear...i will start writing that style again....****

If I could be anything in the world, I would want to be your tear. I would be born in your eyes, live on your cheek, and die on your lips. -Ender

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

1 posted 2001-10-17 10:23 PM

NOway..."normal style"? be yourself write how YOU feel...thats what we do as poets creative lies in YOU not others.

i thought this poem was fine and ryming went quiet well with it

...you write as you wish and thats what makes you unuie from teh others.

[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 10-17-2001).]

never_a_princess
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since 2001-06-09

Posts 82
Show Me the Money

2 posted 2001-10-17 10:40 PM

yeah, what he said *points up at albert's reply*~*agrees* good poem! short but cute and well-written! keep writing!
__o0o_Anna_o0o__ *waves*

Friends are angels who lift us to our feet when our wings have trouble remembering how to fly.

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

3 posted 2001-10-18 08:05 AM

LoL hun im always in a weird mood

)~ N e wayz i know how ur feeling...i liked this poem a lot tho!! Good job!! Keep em comin

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