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hoppy
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0 posted 2001-10-16 04:47 PM


I have returned!

What is it you have to answer?
But to answer you have to ask?
And to ask you have to speak?
And to speak you have to know,
The answer.

© Copyright 2001 Hoppy - All Rights Reserved
AngelPoet87
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1 posted 2001-10-16 04:51 PM


That has GOT to be the BEST poem I EVER read in my WHOLE entire LIFE! Lol, welcome back Hoppy!
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2 posted 2001-10-16 06:03 PM


hoppy,
ok now i have to be a good person and tell you that this is a poetry forum, used for posting poetry... you can edit or delete this post...u can edit it and say something like "roses are red, its time to go to bed, arent u glad im back, i want to buy a new hat" and that would be just fine...but a one line, non poem piece isnt exactly supposed to be here...if you do not act upon this  someone will most likely move it to teenchat...thanks!
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3 posted 2001-10-16 06:25 PM


omg!!!!!! thats SUCH a good poem!!!!!! thats goin in my aim info!!!!!! wow.

Love is like learning to play the piano. First you must learn to play by the rules, then you must forget the rules and play by your heart.  

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4 posted 2001-10-17 06:06 PM


need we all go back to poetry class?  if need be we can infact argue that this is a poem, an expression of the author's true and deep emotions expressed to his fellow peers in the modest one line poem.  

If you look deeper into this piece you will see that the reference to a person returning definatly points to a deeper venue.  It insinuates that they have been in a place and have now come out of that place.  This arises questions to the reader such as "where have they been" what insights have they found intheir former state of being.  The reference to "I" is it a reference to the person themselves or their inner being?  
I will not insult your intellect by stating text book definition of poem, because in ever aspect of the word, this is infact apoem, short and sweet and to the point bringing up questions to the reader that they may never have thought of before.  Such as"can you ever really return"?   once you leave a current place and then come back are you really "returning" or entering into an entirely new place, because no one moment in time is the same as the next.  

Look deeper, and do try to think deeper, and by all means, write deeper....we are but treading on the shallow end of a deep pool

[This message has been edited by hoppy (edited 10-17-2001).]

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5 posted 2001-10-17 06:36 PM


quote:
"I will not insult your intellect by stating text book definition of poem, because in ever aspect of the word, this is infact apoem, short and sweet and to the point bringing up questions to the reader that they may never have thought of before.........Look deeper, and do try to think deeper, and by all means, write deeper....we are but treading on the shallow end of a deep pool"
unquote:


I do believe that these words are a little uncalled for.  You might not have the intentions of such insult, but the nature of the words as specified or said still does show more than a little confidence towards one's pressumed intellectual advantage.

As you have stated that every phrase, line, or word could have a deeper meaning, such a line could also be taken in simplest form.  Thus an understanding of, "Hey guys, I'm back here in Passions In Poetry" as a given example.  So, please do understand that side of other readers.  Thank you


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6 posted 2001-10-17 06:38 PM


What he said ^
and im gonna kill visa mastercard.com if this ad pops up one more time!

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7 posted 2001-10-17 08:05 PM


quote:
if need be we can infact argue that this is a poem


You can, indeed, argue it ...

... in a Discussion forum.

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