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Isabel Galaxia
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since 2000-06-18
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0 posted 2001-10-15 08:26 PM


This is inspired by and loosely based on 3 Doors Down's "I need you"  If you read it with the music, it sounds better.


If you could ask me one thing, what would it be?
Would you have me tell you that I love and need you?
If you could tell me anything, would it be what I'd tell you?
Would you look inside my head and say what I want to hear?
Oh no, Just can't let you go
Could you tell me I can keep you
'Cuz with you I discovered love
Countless things I had dreamt of
They're just a couple things
You showed me how to do.
I love you, I still need you
I need you, I still need you.
If you could know just one thing, would it be something that'd hurt you?
And if you knew why I love you, would you still question?
If I set you free,
Would you come back and be forever mine?
No you're my everything
When you walk away my heart could break
And I don't know what to do, so tell me.
Oh no, Just can't let you go
Could you tell me that I can keep you
'Cuz with you I discovered love
Countless things I had dreamt of
They're just a couple of the things
You've shown me how to do.
I love you, I still need you
I need you, I still need you.


- Dedicated to my love, my boyfriend, Craig.  If there's anyone in the world who doesn't know, I say to them now that I love you more than anyone, and they can't change that.-

© Copyright 2001 Isabel Galaxia - All Rights Reserved
CLBinLOVE
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since 2000-06-04
Posts 147
Hilton Head, SC, USA
1 posted 2001-10-15 09:06 PM


*smiles* awwwwww....what else can i say?
ill ask you no such questions
i already know the answer
if i could tell you everything,
i hope itd be all you want to hear
i know baby
i know, keep you *smiles again*
i love you

"as below so above and beyond i imagine
drawn beyond the lines of reason
push the envelope, watch it bend"
--Tool

Spice
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since 2001-04-13
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2 posted 2001-10-20 05:01 PM


Bel- Wow!
"If I set you free,
Would you come back and be forever mine?
No you're my everything
When you walk away my heart could break"

"Could you tell me that I can keep you
'Cuz with you I discovered love"

I absolutely fell inlove with this piece...It's beautifully done...I can really connect with it.

Every now and then I like to stick my foot in my mouth...

Dark Enchantress
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3 posted 2001-10-20 10:03 PM


Could you tell me that I can keep you
'Cuz with you I discovered love

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That was my favorite part, but the whole poem from start to finish was great.  

There are always answers as long as you're open enough to accept the answers you were not looking for.

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4 posted 2001-10-20 11:09 PM


Aawww! I think I'm going to cry! What a sweet poem!

If you define cowardice as running away, tripping and screaming at the first sign of danger, then yes, Mister Brave Man, I guess I am a coward.

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5 posted 2001-11-02 02:34 PM


very sweet indeed
keep em coming
rice a roni

là où est mon amour?
donde está mi amour?
wo ist meine Liebe?


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