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luckyducky_505
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0 posted 2001-10-13 10:26 PM


I'm still working on this one but still wanted to share it!! I want to add a second part, think I should?
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Joy comes upon me when you walk by.
Ordinary feelings, but not an ordinary guy.
Happniess overflows my body.
Never did I think I would feel this way again.

Timid and shy -- whatever not you!
Addiction is what I feel for you.
Neither of us act the same with each other.
Not knowing each other well breaks my heart.
Everyone says we should go out
Remember me when you leave for college!

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If you were paying attention every first letter of each line is the letters that spell out John Tanner!! Love you!!

Smile -- because you never know who's falling in love with it.

When you dream you imagine and when you imagine you dream!!

© Copyright 2001 Tiffany L. McDonald - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-10-14 12:02 PM


aaawww! I don't have anything to say but aaawww! Add a second part if you want to, it's your poem!

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2 posted 2001-10-14 04:21 PM


enjoyed reading your acrostic.
well done!

I'd never tried that form, but I like to read them.

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3 posted 2001-10-15 07:54 AM


Ahhhh hun im sorry i didnt reply last night when u IM'd me but somethin was wrong w/my comp so this is the first one im replying to at school lol...ok..i thought this was a very sweet poem..i personally think it does need a little bit more but thats just me. Great job!
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4 posted 2001-10-15 11:18 AM


I just love acrostics, well done on a wonderful example  

Andrew

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5 posted 2001-10-15 04:57 PM


acrostic pieces are nice...and dunno about the adding part...anyways, i like it lots as it is...great job.

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6 posted 2001-10-15 05:47 PM


Aww.... thanks everybody!!! I have been trying to think of stuff to add to it but nothing has struck me yet... maybe if we don't work out *knock on wood* I can add another thing... or use his middle name!!! Thanks again!!

When I first saw you, I was afraid to talk to you. When I first talked to you, I was afraid to like you. When I first liked you, I was afraid to love

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