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LucidityNow
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0 posted 2001-10-12 03:27 AM



I felt suicidal, I felt homicidal,

I felt depression, I felt obsession,

I felt lust, I felt love,

I felt the aid from above,

I felt the flames of Hell,

I have left the promises, to tell.

I lifted the weight,

I felt the undying hate,

I've conformed Twisted Fate,

into my grasping state.

I've been restless, I've slept,

I've lost the things I've kept,

I've been lost, I've been found,

I've made no attempt to sound,

I've given opinions, I've been judged,

I've been pushed, I've been nudged,

I've fallen, I've risen,

I've been innocent, I've been imprisoned.

I've been trapped, I've been freed,

I've been helped, I've felt need,

I felt controlling, I felt helpless,

I felt conscious, I felt mindless.

Today, I feel the same,

Tomorrow, another game,

The next day, you die, the next day you hide.

After that, you've come to decide,

it's your life, and you've known you tried.

You've breathed, you've sighed,

you've tried to kill me, you've lied,

You've felt nothing, you've confidence to confide,

You've never known me, until the day I died.


and i'm certain that if i drive into those trees, it would make less of a mess, than she's made of me...

© Copyright 2001 Jesse Wintonyk - All Rights Reserved
Barelybreathing
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1 posted 2001-10-12 03:58 AM


hey this is totally awesome...keep writing!

'The greatest thing in the world is to know how to be one's own.'
~Montaigne~


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2 posted 2001-10-12 10:04 AM


This was an absolutely amazing write!! Full of emotion and pain...I've felt these things too..stay strong...i'm always here for you

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3 posted 2001-10-12 10:07 AM


much enjoyed read, thanks for sharing



hi Sweets ,  Lizzy ,  Jesa ,  Ina ,  Allysa ,  Marie ,  Cherish ,  Jenn ,  Chelsea ,  Leah ,  Kimmie ,  Ashley ,  Smurfy ,  Alexia ,  Kamie ,  Kari ,  Nan ,   Zu ,  Lml ,  Albertia ,  Linc ,  Jesse ,    


Jeen
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4 posted 2001-10-12 11:04 AM


Good read...  You expressed the emotions simply but powerfully.

Jeen

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5 posted 2001-10-12 10:28 PM


i feel you..your not the only one with these emotions!   good write hope to see more ~Jess~

~*~How can we be friends if everytime I think of you I know that's all we'll ever be~*~

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6 posted 2001-10-12 11:19 PM


This was just awesome! I love it!!

If you define cowardice as running away and screaming at the first sign of danger, then yes, Mister Brave Man, I guess I am a coward.

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