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quietlydying

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since 2001-06-10

Posts 935
the wonderful land of oz

0 posted 2001-10-12 01:50 AM

Minutes
turn to hours
as I sip
on the bitterness
eating me out
from the inside,
right to
my toes.
Maybe I should
stop
for a
break
and
take that
sweet plummet
into nothingness.

- jen

so foul and fair a day i have not seen. - macbeth act 1, scene 3

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2001-10-12 01:59 AM

so I'm hoping that sweet nothingness is sleep, and not a reference to hurting yourself.

quietlydying

Senior Member

since 2001-06-10

Posts 935
the wonderful land of oz

2 posted 2001-10-12 02:01 AM

if you take into account the title, it will all make sense, and you'll see it's an anti poem.

::shurgs::

- jen

so foul and fair a day i have not seen. - macbeth act 1, scene 3

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

3 posted 2001-10-12 02:18 AM

you lost me, what is an anti poem?

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

4 posted 2001-10-12 10:19 AM

An anti-poem is any poem on a subject that is against what the person is talking about i think...Like if its about drugs it says things about how bad they r and stuff within the poem so under it all it's an anti-poem.....n e wayz i think thats what it is lol

I enjoyed this a lot...nice job and keep writing

Skyfire

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since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

5 posted 2001-10-12 11:08 PM

Oh I like the way you ended this! Yay!!!

If you define cowardice as running away and screaming at the first sign of danger, then yes, Mister Brave Man, I guess I am a coward.

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

6 posted 2001-10-13 05:28 PM

long live the "anti-poem"s LOL...well, its a thought-provoking piece...in simplistic ways...enjoyed the read.

=)

Spice
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since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

7 posted 2001-10-20 04:32 PM

hi Jen!

Great job here...Loved it all!

Every now and then I like to stick my foot in my mouth...

Kicking Kim
Member

since 2001-04-16

Posts 426
Cloud Cucko Land!

8 posted 2001-10-20 08:29 PM

Excelent poem I liked the message as well!! It was very well thought out! Great job!

^*~Kicking Kim~*^

"Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression"

Dark Enchantress
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since 1999-07-27

Posts 1258
meet Morgana

9 posted 2001-10-20 10:12 PM

Too many people jump too soon... I've been lucky enough to pull back a few (my mom, my best friend, some guy at school...) but it really hurts when I think about their pain... and mine. *sigh* Blah.. enough of my mush.. thanks for posting this.. I'm starting to expect this sort of excellent poetry from you.

There are always answers as long as you're open enough to accept the answers you were not looking for.

jaimespoetry.blogspot.com

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

10 posted 2001-11-02 09:56 AM

hmmmmm.......you always seem to make me think
keep em coming

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