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quietlydying

Senior Member

since 2001-06-10

Posts 935
the wonderful land of oz

0 posted 2001-10-08 02:44 AM

i've noticed that my poetry stands out quite a bit here. [it's new and intriguing apparently] heh. oh well, that's the way i write, that's the way i like to write. ::grins::

anwyays, here's a stupid little bit that just popped out of my head one day.

- - - - -

the stars in my
eyes
are beginning to
fade.
do you
remember the day
you stole the
music from me?

- - - - -

so what do you think?

- jen

so foul and fair a day i have not seen. - macbeth act 1, scene 3

Jenn Cirrincione

Member Elite

since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

1 posted 2001-10-08 08:51 AM

I think that I love it! It kinda reminds me of an episode of friends...."lightning bearers that steal wind from us godesses..."

hehe I don't no where that came from, sry.

But I liked this, short, but really good.

Jenn

"I want love on my own terms; after everything I've ever learned. Me, I carry too much baggage..."

anonymousfemale
Member Elite

since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

2 posted 2001-10-08 12:44 PM

Yes I do remember the day and I want the music back!!

now being serious for a moment, I do like this piece. I can connect with it (what's new??) and it's a good write.

Well done. Thanks for the read.

~AF~

I look at myself in the mirror; am I vital today?
Nelly Furtado - Hey Man

Marshalzu

Member Elite

since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

3 posted 2001-10-08 04:17 PM

Yeah new and intriguing (sp?) A great piece of work, short, sweet and very precise one for the library me thinks...

"Ph33r Me I eat N00bies Ph0R bReakFAsT"
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Skyfire

Member Elite

since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

4 posted 2001-10-08 11:41 PM

I think I like... I think it's intriuging... I think it's very... original... I think YOU are a very original person yourself to be able to write poetry that is so totally non-mainstream! Keep it up, I look forward to more!

If you define cowardice as running away and screaming at the first sign of danger, then yes, Mister Brave Man, I guess I am a coward.

pharon
Member

since 1999-11-13

Posts 251
alabama

5 posted 2001-10-09 02:31 AM

LOVED it! of course i do have something for those short poems!! good job

me

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

6 posted 2001-10-18 10:13 AM

the reason why your poetry seems to stand out is because you leave so many avenues for the mind to think

awesome job as usuall, keep it up

[This message has been edited by Anonymousfemale (edited 01-01-2000).]

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

7 posted 2001-10-18 10:20 AM

This was beautiful!!!! I hope they give u the stars back...This was sad but very good!

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