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Patty o'brien
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0 posted 2001-10-07 03:35 PM


Here is my idea of a friend

lst grade
Gies you their cookie when you drop yours at snack time

2nd grade
Give you the red crayon so you dont have to use the ugly brown one

3rd Grade
Tells you its ok when you get scared at your first sleepover away from home

4th grade
Gets off the bus to wait with you when you miss your bus

5th grade
Gives you their own time to listen about your parents breaking up

6th grade
Carrys your books when you break your leg

7th grade
Goes up to your secret crush to see if she like you

8th grade
Jokes with you about who will be first shoved into a locker in high school

9th grade
Tells you he really knows where you class is just to make it seem like he isnt completely lost

10th grade
Drives you home when he reliezes you are to drunk to even stand

11th
Goes to a tux shop with you to get both your tuxs for your first prom

12th
Starts cring with joy and hugs you after he finishes his validictorian speach

[This message has been edited by Patty o'brien (edited 10-07-2001).]

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1 posted 2001-10-07 03:58 PM


Welcome! I liked this, very real   Please check your email for a special greeting!  ~SEA
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2 posted 2001-10-07 05:23 PM


Welcome to passions and I like your entrance.Well done!

Charisma

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3 posted 2001-10-07 05:31 PM


Welcome to passions, I hope you enjoy your stay here, may I suggest going to Teen Chat in the discussion area as it well help you get to know people and possibly get more replies... anyway great solid poetry  
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4 posted 2001-10-07 07:17 PM


Can I say "How true"??? Awesome idea of a friend... reminded me of my own best friend! Welcome to Passions, and I hope you keep posting!

If you define cowardice as running away and screaming at the first sign of danger, then yes, Mister Brave Man, I guess I am a coward.

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5 posted 2001-10-08 10:30 AM


Welcome to Passions!!

Ahh friendship. It's a decent thing to have. Your first piece is very thought provoking and has actually inspired me to some degree. It brought back memories. Painful but still, they should be looked at once in a while.

Thanks for the read. I hope you enjoy it here as much as we do and that you find whatever you're looking for in life.

~AF~

I look at myself in the mirror; am I vital today?
Nelly Furtado - Hey Man

katherine
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6 posted 2001-10-09 02:50 AM


welcome to passions    (your proberly sick of hearing that by now).
This is such an awesome poem very true aswell, well done.

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7 posted 2001-10-09 10:23 AM


WELCOME WELCOME WELCOME!!!!

This was such an awesome piece!! I've never seen one quite like this before!! It was cute, real, touching and sad all in one...Absolutely amazing job here..you made me a fan already!! LoL WELCOME!!!!

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8 posted 2001-10-10 11:55 PM


WELCOME!!!!
great way to portray a friend.
It's so true!

It Feels As If I've Always Been Someone On The Outside Looking In.

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9 posted 2001-10-15 07:07 PM


This was pretty inspiring. I really liked it a lot. You did this very well. Welcome to Passions.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

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