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0 posted 2001-10-07 03:17 PM




Never seen your face light,
up like this before.
I can't help but smile,
'cause it's you I adore.
I'm lost in your eyes,
OH oho, you stole my heart.
With one touch in the night,
you are my shinning star.

Come and dance with me,
and let me take a sip,
come and set me free,
with your sweet lips.

Every day and night,
I only dream of you.
'Til the end of time,
you and me forever so true.


Come and dance with me,
and let me take a sip,
come and set me free,
with your sweet lips.

I can't imagine life without you,
can't describe what you mean to me.
I picture you whenever I'm blue,
girl you you are the air I breathe.

Come and dance with me,
and let me take a sip,
come and set me free,
with your sweet lips.

© Copyright 2001 Brian Eggertsen - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-10-07 07:52 PM


Oh wow, that is so great! I think I've read ones by you that are a tiny bit better, but not by much. Right on!

If you define cowardice as running away and screaming at the first sign of danger, then yes, Mister Brave Man, I guess I am a coward.

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2 posted 2001-10-08 04:14 PM


Great work, I've read some of your stuff before and I really am Impressed by your work, keep on posting  

Zu

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pharon
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alabama
3 posted 2001-10-09 02:27 AM


well done, it has a bit of a song feel...it got me humming a tune...

          me

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