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repost of the last 2 poems I shared
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repost of the last 2 poems I shared |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Sorry that I haven't really shared in a while. it's just that I haven't found any inspiration to write about. My life has been an utter bore lately. Or is it thtat cupid missed me again and hit my muse thus killing her  A Memory of Forgotten Dreams Angelic voice thru silence of melancholy nights Oh virgin silhouette floating on gentle breeze A sight..... Yes..... a sight that in brilliance of skies lit blue And pearls that shine..... thus greet all with subtle delight Reddened lips surrounded of passion’s untold Magnificent crown’s lost in waves of seas An essence... aromatic wonder of redolent garden blossoms What lustrous..... timeless..... flawless sheath of silk and gold These are images carved on this, a lover’s theme Still cold to your touch of sweet caress So again..... I trance wistfully into this, a gentle slumber For you my love..... are nothing but..... “a memory of forgotten dreams” ____________________________________________________________________ Twilight's Serenade Serenaded by stars thru peaceful twilight In dreams alone you dance upon moonlit clouds What moment set amidst this, a tranquil night A Flower’s bow… ‘Tis a gracious ovation endowed Elegance kept in this gentle prance Sways a subtle waltz adrift an emulous crescent-light Amongst the skies gliding, leaving a hypnotic trance A terpsichorean born... Oh, what heavenly beauty in sight This ambience set by such radiant charm A gracious smile donned, curing a lover’s pride Paramount guise in painting bestowing an ivory sight Truly an angel… My immaculate rose of eventide hi Sweets, Lizzy, Jesa, Ina, Allysa, Marie, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Chelsea, Baker, Leah, Jess, Kimmie |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
aww..you shouldnt have  haha..wonderful ..you know that**You can't always trust the people you want to** |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Both of these are absoloutely amazing, nice to read them again "Ph33r Me I eat N00bies Ph0R bReakFAsT" |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"I trance wistfully into this, a gentle slumber For you my love..... are nothing but..... “a memory of forgotten dreams” "What moment set amidst this, a tranquil night A Flower’s bow… ‘Tis a gracious ovation endowed" My goodness Acire ... these are truly splendid! Such tender sentiments and wonderful phrasing throughout these romantic and tranquil verses ... just lovely my friend! Best wishes, /Kit |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Acies, I love these, I hope you find inspiration soon.....I'd like to read more |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
You already know I like these But I'm glad you reposted!! Well, let's reincarnate the muse, c'mon!! Jenn "You've got to get yourself together, you got stuck in a moment, and you can't get out of it." |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Awww... those are soooo sweet! Maybe in order to understand mankind, we have to look at the word itself: "Mankind". Basically, it's made up of two separate words - "mank" and "ind". |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
NO! I killed her!! muahahaha  lol  You already know how much I like these two pieces. They're a great example of how much talent you really do hold inside. Even if you jus write tiny, tiny pieces they could all add up to be one huge one in the long run. THEN you will have something to post. The person they are written about is perfect. She must surely appreciate them. ~AF~ I look at myself in the mirror; am I vital today? |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
shhhhhhhhhhhh  Thanks anyways everyone hi Sweets, Lizzy, Jesa, Ina, Allysa, Marie, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Chelsea, Baker, Leah, Jess, Kimmie |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
oh wow!!!!..i remember the second one but the first one's slipped my memory...dang you toona...you should post more often!!!  ...you know you write wonderfully. you always manage to take my breath away. i think kit said everything i wanted to say- your words are really quietly beautiful. unleash those hidden thoughts NOW!..and your muse is not dead- she ran away!  anyways good job on both of em- enjoyed them greatly poppy seed wouldnt it be wonderful if children werent scared of looking up at the sky? |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
This was very good. I liked them both alot. on another note How have you been? its been a while |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i ONLY wish you would share more often...these both were truly wonderful pieces...suc beauty within your words...you sure are talented..hehe  ...more says ME!=) |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This was great acire!! You should really share with us more often, your poetry is amazing Keep postin |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
I've replied to both of these before... Loved each of them.. You are so awesome! *Touches you and ooo's and aaaa's* Hmmm...Too lazy to write anything else baout the second one..HaHa- So I'll just copy and paste what I said the 1st time... *Bends to the floor and kisses your feet* I absolutely LOVED this write. In fact, I think you should repost it in Teen 5 so more people can see it, or see it again. I thought it was done SO beautifully. And I agree with you, the adjectives are there to DESCRIBE... So by god there should be ALOT! I fell madly inlove with this line. "A Flower’s bow…" It caught my eye and I thought it was absolutely PERFECT. You are truely a magnificent writer. You need to post more, dammit! *** I see you took my advice and reposted...*nudge* lol And if you need inspiration for writing, by god- Just think of me and how much you love me! LOL Again- Both of these are absolutely incredible- You are extremely talented!  Every now and then I like to stick my foot in my mouth... |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
thanks all and thanks Jesa, that's really a sweet thing to say  là où est mon amour? donde está mi amour? wo ist meine Liebe? [This message has been edited by acire (edited 10-20-2001).] |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
*I* just felted like reading these wonderful poems [again] Hey...#25437 |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
*Points at Albert* LIES! ALL LIES! You just replied in hopes of him "taking a wee glane" at your poetry and "bumping" it up to the top. ...hmmm... Not a bad Idea......Acire? LOL "I'd rather die purposely alone than to have lived an accidental life of solitude."- Jesa "§ùgã®" Thompson |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
Ha, he already bumped up some poems. i didnt ask or prepared him to do so... Only did it...cause i thought acrie should get some replys. i *bumped* it for him NOT for my reasons. Damn if you dont know the situation. back the Hell up! Hey...#25437 |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Acire~ As always your work is very beautiful but you need to start writing some new poems here CheeseCake!!! Im pretty sure I replied to these along time ago but its been so long since I read a poem by you!!!  So write some more!!!~ShAtTeReD mEmOrIeS, |
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DawnG
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
Acire, It's good to see you again. I love these poems. They are very beautiful. I hope you find your muse soon. Dawn |
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