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pharon
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0 posted 2001-10-05 12:21 PM



     cracked beneath
         the window
   shines
       night     life
         you dance a
    dream and
        come full cycle


                 me

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1 posted 2001-10-05 09:49 AM


"you dance a dream and come full cycle"

wow, I like this VERY much!  

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2 posted 2001-10-06 11:41 PM


This reminds me of a wedding I went to last night.
Thanks for the read. Much enjoyed.  

~AF~

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3 posted 2001-10-07 02:26 AM


i liked this one very much...well done

If you dont reply to OTHER peoples poems,are targets(peoplewillburnyourhouseinfuriousrage)*ahem*we dont want to put that title on our foreheads,do we?

pharon
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4 posted 2001-10-07 03:49 AM


thanx you guys for the reply's!

          me

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5 posted 2001-10-08 12:09 PM


with so few words you managed to paint a really vivid picture in my head...dacing in the moonlight, and maturing at the same time. thank you for this, i enjoyed it greatly  

wouldnt it be wonderful if children werent scared of looking up at the sky?

       

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6 posted 2001-10-17 12:15 PM


I can really see that your style has changed. You did well here, but it wasn't my favorite. it was deeply read by me, though, and I did appreciate it for what it meant.
nicely done.  

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

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7 posted 2001-10-18 10:18 AM


This sounds so magical  ) Nice  )

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

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8 posted 2001-10-18 10:18 AM


lol whoops

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

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