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Jenn Cirrincione
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0 posted 2001-10-03 04:28 PM


You thief...
You sneak...
Disguised as love,
You weakened me.
Never thought,
I could fall,
for blatent lies,
but I was fooled.
I believed in you,
and you set me up,
to let me down.
My demise pre-planned,
from your elevated pedestal.
What my heart once did feel,
I now choose to forget.
What has meant so much,
Now disappearing.
Inner peace will soon return,
and memories they fade.
Nothing here left to say;
'goodbye' resting in the silence.

[This message has been edited by Jenn Cirrincione (edited 10-03-2001).]

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1 posted 2001-10-03 05:39 PM


This is real powerful Jenn it brought a tear to my eye, I really empathise with you and you know if you want to talk i'm here for you. Great work on expressing your pain so beautifully  

Andrew

"He's a nut, crazy in the coconut"- Avalanches " Frontier Psychitrist"

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2 posted 2001-10-04 10:46 AM


Yes!!! Woohoo!!   Power to you.  

I love this, Jenn! It shows your true strength in this situation and your ability to let go as such. Very emotional but it does let your character shine through brightly.  

Thanks for sharing this, Jenn.  

~AF~

"Reality is only a feeble rendering of the energy brought forth by the imagination"

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3 posted 2001-10-04 10:50 AM


You ever just wake-up one morning, and you know you're ok...? Well, here I am!   Things happen and you gotta get over it. Life goes on...

Thanks for your replies.

Jenn

"You've got to get yourself together, you got stuck in a moment, and you can't get out of it."

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4 posted 2001-10-04 12:39 PM


Ya know, I'll always be around to talk to  
Hope you are feeling better
stay strong

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Jesa, Ina, Allysa, Marie, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Chelsea, Baker, Leah, Jess, Kimmie

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5 posted 2001-10-14 03:13 PM



Yes Acire, I know. Thanks.  

"I want love on my own terms; after everything I've ever learned. Me, I carry too much baggage..."

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6 posted 2001-10-18 07:35 PM


I really liked this one. It had a lot of power and I just want you to know that if you ever need to yell at someone for how annoying they are, it's me you can come to  

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

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7 posted 2001-10-18 07:37 PM


i really liked this one.  they rhythm was great.

- jen

so foul and fair a day i have not seen.  - macbeth act 1, scene 3

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8 posted 2001-10-19 08:51 AM


This was an interesting poem in my opinion, i dont think i could put my feelings on this topic into such wonderful words the way you did...excellent job!

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

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9 posted 2001-10-19 09:33 AM


~Inner peace will soon return,
and memories they fade.
Nothing here left to say;
'goodbye' resting in the silence.~

Powerful piece, especially these final lines are very well expressed.

Charisma

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10 posted 2001-10-19 10:18 AM


darn lyin men! im tellin ya..BAD news! But neways..good poem, showed so much emotion. beautiful as always  

*dq

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11 posted 2001-10-19 04:52 PM


Thanks everyone   Your comments are appreciated.  

"I want love on my own terms; after everything I've ever learned. Me, I carry too much baggage..."

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12 posted 2001-11-08 01:06 PM


another great poem by Jenn. told you i'm gonna read all of your work that i missed and i mean it. keep it up and thanks for repling to my poems.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


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