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DragonFang
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0 posted 2001-10-02 10:09 PM


I just sorta closed my eyes today and wrote and this is what came out, nothing in the way of a problem in my life or any of that.

Fire floods the mind
A deluge of rage that cried
For the torments to cease
Before my heart does freeze
For what you do to me
Please just set me free...

"Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \
I am lost in my own mind.


© Copyright 2001 Samson C. Justice - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-10-02 11:52 PM


Oh I like very much!

Mr T trusts me with coaching the Jr. Girls rugby team. What was he THINKING?!?!?!

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2 posted 2001-10-06 12:07 PM


not bad at all for such a short poem
thanks for sharing

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anonymousfemale
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3 posted 2001-10-07 03:19 AM


I definitely enjoyed readin this, Dragon Fang. It had so much in it despite the length. The ending is great. Those pauses really bring out what this piece is all about.

Thanks for sharing this. I look forward to more.  

~AF~

I look at myself in the mirror; am I vital today?
Nelly Furtado - Hey Man

Spine Grinder
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Standing In Silence...
4 posted 2001-10-07 03:14 PM


wow, this was colorful despite it's length, i liked it alot...thanks 4 the read..

Did u ever have the feeling that he meant everything 2 u, yet u meant nothing 2 him?.....~me
~I keep on falling in and out of love with u~Alicia Keys

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