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Dark Enchantress
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0 posted 2001-10-02 07:17 PM


The water hits my flesh
hot and burning
as I look over my wounds
letting the liquid tragedy
run down my arm
and into the shower drain
It had been worse this time,
I knew - for I ripped at myself
with a rage I could not control
And not much earlier
when I cut my hair,
I watched the years fall down
at my feet, and then
I cut off the other side
Tears drowning my mind
as I let myself hit the floor
like an old rag doll
tossed into the trash
Not good for anything
anymore

I used to be pretty

There are always answers as long as you're open enough to accept the answers you were not looking for.

© Copyright 2001 Morgana - All Rights Reserved
Isabel Galaxia
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1 posted 2001-10-02 07:46 PM


I'm pretty sure I understand how you feel, though it may be in an abstracted way.  I LOVE the last line, it adds total power and..kick-ass-ness to the poem.  Well I don't know what to say as far as advice goes...just that I'm always here(I have NO life), so if you need anything,
Bel

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2 posted 2001-10-02 07:51 PM


wow

"If I made you mad today, would you still love me tomorrow?"-Incubus

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3 posted 2001-10-05 08:50 PM


VERY powerful and the way you written is awesome...the discription and the way you symbolized the doll,hair ahhh!!..just everything was...wOW..
silvrduck
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4 posted 2001-10-05 10:51 PM


Oh wow, this was amazing! I agree, the last line was really a kicker.  I hope everything is going alright with you though  
Great post
take care,
Sarah

*the chains which once held us are only the chains which we've made*
~jewel

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5 posted 2001-10-06 12:18 PM


Oh that is so great! The last line is AWESOME!!! Into my library it goes!

Maybe in order to understand mankind, we have to look at the word itself: "Mankind". Basically, it's made up of two separate words - "mank" and "ind".

zarina
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6 posted 2001-10-06 11:38 AM


waw. this is excellent. the last line just gave it.. like..   !! thanks for sharing.

I'm always myslef. Isn't that enough for you?

anonymousfemale
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7 posted 2001-10-06 12:20 PM


Such emotion, such power! Alright!!  
I love this. Honestly, I really do. The way you've written it is like a really easy riddle but it can also imply other things without actually setting it in concrete.

Well done. You blew my mind.  

~AF~

I look at myself in the mirror; am I vital today?
Nelly Furtado - Hey Man

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8 posted 2001-10-18 10:26 AM


Confidence on one's self is what matters
Maybe you need to learn to confident
Being pretty is being able to feel confident on who you are and how you look
thanks for sharing
hope thing go well for you
*hugs*

[This message has been edited by Anonymousfemale (edited 01-01-2000).]

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