Untitled - pipTalk Forums

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

NathanS
Member

since 2001-09-27

Posts 106
CA

0 posted 2001-10-01 10:54 PM

Well,i wrote this one before the other one- I don't like it personally... I dunno why, i just don't; I didn't even really end it.. heh.. but the one person who read it said they really liked it, so i figured maybe others would enjoy the read. If not- feel plenty free not to post.

The sky shined dark
In a pleasent 'eve
I said my words
In hope that she'd believe

Mother moon cast her rays
Upon the face i looked to
Upon the face i loved
Such rays made that face so wonderous
It could have been from above

In the cool night air
Did we stand there
Holding one another
Without any seperate care

The breeze took place
We held the other closer still
In wonderous thoughts
"How could life be so fair"
I was with the one i loved..

Yeah..
-Nathan

Delirious_Smurf
Member

since 2001-08-08

Posts 90
Nothingness,P.R.

1 posted 2001-10-01 11:20 PM

You didn't like it??
I loved it!!

I loved everything about it...it rocked!
Keep it up

I'm a professional happy puppet.

Acies

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

2 posted 2001-10-02 06:32 PM

wow, this is amazing
simple words make such elegance
awesome poem
thanks for the read

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Jesa, Ina, Allysa, Marie, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Chelsea, Baker, Leah, Jess, Kimmie

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

3 posted 2001-10-03 08:10 AM

You wrote this beautifully...i can really picture the night and the atmosphere as i was reading..your imagery was great

nice job!

AngelPoet87
Member

since 2001-04-21

Posts 280
Indy

4 posted 2001-10-03 11:09 PM

Nathan you're a nut! This is absolutly lovely! Great job, keep writing always.
~Ali

Liefhe alle ten spijte van duivel.

aaron woodside
Member

since 2001-09-26

Posts 256

5 posted 2001-10-04 12:22 PM

I like this one even more. I wish I could find that special girl. No luck yet though. Guess I'll just keep looking. This was very cool.

Ex Animo,
Aaron

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.