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Kosetsu
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0 posted 2001-10-01 05:23 PM


You’re pushing me to the edge again.
I can’t take much more of this.
There’s something lacking in all your words.
So where’s the love that’s gone amiss?

What’s wrong with you?
Why’ve you got to hold me so tight?
I didn’t think you could be so insecure.
We both know the flames these words’ll ignite.

I won’t bow down to you.
You’ve got to let me go free.
I need to be who I’m supposed to be,
How can I with you holding on to me?

I feel like I need to scream,
I need to let it all out,
Watch me fall, watch me drop,
Will that cease all your doubt?

Why am I even trying?
I’ve helped you through your hurt,
Why won’t you help me through mine?
Why’ve you got to leave me in the dirt?


"Diplomacy is the art of saying 'Nice Doggy' while you search for a rock." - Will Rogers

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Kevin
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1 posted 2001-10-01 05:26 PM


Been there before
Its not fun
Sometimes we hold ourselves back for others and think its them...that might be your answer
good luck
great poem

HopelessRomanticGuy
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2 posted 2001-10-01 07:10 PM


Hey!  I can post w/o my computer crashing! Yay!  Wow!  That was some poem, I never thought that someone can hold so tightly, so I have one thing to say, both are possible, they could be holding you back, but you could also be holding yourself back for them.  Just an Idea.

Love will come and love will go, but friends are forever (usually).

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3 posted 2001-10-02 06:42 PM


Adam...
  Was that about me? I just felt like you were speaking to me when you wrote that.
   One thing I do need to do is apoligize to you... I am sorry. Yes, I am very unstable. And I have been trying to work through it for the past month or so. No, I do NOT hate you for the email you sent me - If I felt anything though it, it was hate for myself. That's all I've been feeling here lately. I am so sorry, sweetheart. Please forgive me... I still love you.

What don't kill you can only make you stronger...

Love you, Adam!! :)

Kosetsu
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4 posted 2001-10-02 07:19 PM


Jess...

In part..it was about you...this one was mostly a rant towards my parents, my friends, almost everyone in my life. Sometimes it feels like they rely on me constantly, but when I need them...they're never there.

I wish you'd tell me about your feelings. You know I want to help you through them. If anything, just tell me you need to be alone to think out some stuff. Don't just vanish like that and leave me worrying that something's happened to you.

I still love you too, please don't think that I don't. But I just need some time to sort stuff out. Maybe...if the dice rolls in our favor...but right now I just need some time to sort out my thoughts.

-Adam
P.S. don't hate yourself Jessica...I've done that to myself too many times, and it doesn't help anything. If you need to hate someone, hate me, or hate the dice.

"Diplomacy is the art of saying 'Nice Doggy' while you search for a rock." - Will Rogers

AngelPoet87
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5 posted 2001-10-02 08:51 PM


*sits back*
aaron woodside
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6 posted 2001-10-02 10:00 PM



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Jessica
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7 posted 2001-10-02 11:14 PM


I understand completely... But I can't keep from hating myself. If you had been through and done what I have you would surely hate yourself even more than you felt you have in the past.   I love you...

What don't kill you can only make you stronger...

Love you, Adam!! :)

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8 posted 2001-10-02 11:41 PM


Very heartfelt, and very deep. I like it a lot, and I totally understand where you're coming from. I think that you need to talk to this person about how you're feeling instead of just letting it go and keeping it inside. That just causes fights, and it's so much more fun when you both know what's going on. Good luck, and good writing!

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silvrduck
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9 posted 2001-10-03 03:28 PM


Not a fun situation  
Great poem though, i really enjoyed it.
Hope everything works out for you

Take care,
Sarah

*the chains which have held us are only the chains which we've made*
~jewel

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10 posted 2001-10-04 09:00 AM


I agree with silvrduck..not a fun situation at all..i hope things get better but you expressed your feelings nicely...i liked it a lot..great job and keep postin!
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11 posted 2001-10-20 12:12 PM


Adam!!!!  
This was OUTSTANDING! you just said EVERYTHING I wanted to say...You just completely expressed my thoughts and feelings...Uncanny!
"
Why am I even trying?
I’ve helped you through your hurt,
Why won’t you help me through mine?
Why’ve you got to leave me in the dirt?"

I know exactly what you are going through, the situation sucks man...But damn you wrote it very well!

Every now and then I like to stick my foot in my mouth...

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