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chasing rain
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0 posted 2001-09-29 10:05 PM


I open my eyes
And I am somewhere far beneath
Yet far above the world.
Surrounded on a street
By faces framed by twenty thousand names,
Their skin transparent against the evening sky.
The night wind revolves in the sky as it sings
As the earth below me trembles.
The night's eyes make it hard
To see the moon above
At an unknown height.
I turn around
And those blank faces vanish.
They were but dreams
Those inconsistant angel things
That flock this world with visions...


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Inconsistant angel things...hehe...I love that. ^_^

~Leah

Va pensiero sull' ali dorate...

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1 posted 2001-09-29 11:15 PM


Whooosh!  This went over my head the first time through.  (I liked that inconsistent angel thing too)

I can fairly easy imagine the picture you are implying.

Nice job, another great one from you  

"and Death i think is no paranthesis"-e.e. cummings

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2 posted 2001-09-30 03:32 PM


ah dreamer ...i REALLY liked this one...thought-provoking, indeed...i like its tone...enjoyed and written very well...great job! JeeJee
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3 posted 2001-10-01 11:13 AM


I really enjoyed this one...you write so beautifully...great job hun and keep it up!
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4 posted 2001-10-01 03:21 PM


Hmmm...now that I read more and more of your poetry I can say that iunderstand you abit more! Before I read this you were really a complete mystery to m...sure we knew eachother abit, but I didn't know how you thought! Now I can say that I know how you think abit better---in otherwords, when you do something I don't understand...I won't think you're a total nut! I can look at your level, and see for myself! Great poem!!!

Then it comes to be that soothing light at the end of your tunnel...

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5 posted 2001-10-06 12:17 PM


I loved it except for one line
angel things?
I know you can do better than that Leah
You're really talented so I expect more  
thanks for sharing

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Jesa, Ina, Allysa, Marie, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Chelsea, Baker, Leah, Jess, Kimmie

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6 posted 2001-10-06 12:19 PM


Awesome, Leah, just awesome! I love the
"inconsistent angel things" part! Great read!

Rhonda

Maybe in order to understand mankind, we have to look at the word itself: "Mankind". Basically, it's made up of two separate words - "mank" and "ind".

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7 posted 2001-10-06 12:18 PM


Hey Leah  

I would love to know what this is about so I'm adding it to my library to read when I'm a tad more sober.  
The wording is very cool though and the message WILL come through eventually. Give it time.  

Thanks for the read and keep on sharing.  

~AF~

I look at myself in the mirror; am I vital today?
Nelly Furtado - Hey Man

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