9.11 [written on sept. 16/01]

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quietlydying

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since 2001-06-10

Posts 935
the wonderful land of oz

0 posted 2001-09-29 03:31 PM

[9.11]

At the hands of the merciless
faint of heart
we lay our blame,
our sorrows,
our blunders.
Swept away in the wind
is the sparkle in his eye,
he dimple in her cheek
and that crooked smile
that no one could ignore.

The meat of our fears
[end of the line desperation]
splatters the sidewalk.

With her torch so bright
she couldn't see the wasp
at her temple?

Poised, lowering his stinger
ready to strike
Again
Again
Again.

Just another casualty
of the synthetic comfort
of our Ikea armchair.

The JVC silverbox shining
light on the sufferings of
others.

Too far away,
that could never
happen here.

- jen

so foul and fair a day i have not seen. - macbeth act 1, scene 3

Songbird
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since 1999-12-15

Posts 2184
Missouri

1 posted 2001-09-29 09:52 PM

I know those feelings, that you described so well.

fozzyozzy
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since 2001-03-15

Posts 336
Lessburg Virginia

2 posted 2001-09-29 11:27 PM

Goodness, this is very good. The thing I liked about it, was you never really flat out told anyone what the subject was (the title is the exception). Anyone with a simple knowledge of history can relate this poem to any other tragedy that happened in America. Timeless making the title a little ironic.

Of course that's just my opinion

"and Death i think is no paranthesis"-e.e. cummings

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

3 posted 2001-09-30 01:01 PM

Wow...this is a powerful piece. Such strength behind your words makes it a brilliant piece. Some fantastic imagery in it too.
Be proud. I enjoyed the read quite a bit.

~AF~

"Reality is only a feeble rendering of the energy brought forth by the imagination"

HopelessRomanticGuy
Member

since 2001-08-17

Posts 495
LI, New York

4 posted 2001-09-30 08:27 PM

The following words are spoken by my dear friend Kerri --->

I don't write much poetry so I don't know that much but this was really good and i wish i could write like that It helps knowing that others have some of the same feeling about that tragedy as I do I thank u 4 that

Kevin

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since 1999-11-02

Posts 729
Torrington, Ct, Usa

5 posted 2001-10-01 05:22 PM

Fight Club Rocks!

Jenn Cirrincione

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since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

6 posted 2001-10-01 06:13 PM

Nice write. I liked it! Looks like you put a lot into writing it.

And ehhhh Kevin.....where the heck did you pull that out of??

"You've got to get yourself together, you got stuck in a moment, and you can't get out of it."

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