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the_rescue
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0 posted 2001-09-28 04:02 PM


Freedom fighters fall
the needed forget the call
bound to the things they once loved
they search in anguish but are shoved,
shoved to the wayside where they must die
shoved to the wayside there they must cry

Individualism has destroyed my inner man
to many questions asked I don't think I can
I don't think I can fight this fight anymore
I don't know what the future has in store
could it be manifestation of this desire
or shall my body fall down into the endless mire
new found glory
it told a story
of my life oh so gory

bound into the future the present and the past
I struggle but my crutches do not last
time and agian I fall flat on my face
I become to myself and you a disgrace
if you only knew the pain I felt at times
if you only knew of all of my crimes
would you still say you love me as you do now
or would you say you could never understand how
how my life became such an endless mess of untangled knots
and where did the story go the begining and the end which I have now forgot

It's to little to late your words fall short
and now my life is in the hands of the mental court
will I plead insanity for the decisions I made
or will I go gracefully with the price to be paid
control me lead me don't allow me to fall
I'm sorry I'm scared you are my all
life without you is so insecure
I just wanted to be something pure and now it seems
that those thoughts are bound in dreams
of days gone by and I must sit and wonder why
though my breath comes short I cannot cry
to the present state this man must DIE.

we fall like the stars then rise like the sun..Repentence.Forgiveness.We are blame worthy hold us to our wrongs..but don't hold our wrongs against us

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punkrockerrobin
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1 posted 2001-09-29 05:10 AM


this was sad! but very good,

mister if you don't email me i'm gonna put you in the corner!!
robin

no officer i wasn't the one that ran up to acire and javi and kissed them than ran away it was that girl *points at lizzy*

TopGunLauren
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2 posted 2001-09-29 11:31 PM


Very sad poem I loved it though keep up the awsome work.
  Lauren

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3 posted 2001-10-04 07:41 AM


I really like this one. It shows a lot about who you are and puts it all on the table as such. The ending isn't too positive though. Don't go ahead and do the drastic thing. if you're dying internally, talk to someone about it.

Keep strong, thanks for the read and I hope to see more.  

~AF~

"Reality is only a feeble rendering of the energy brought forth by the imagination"

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4 posted 2001-10-04 08:52 AM


This was really very much on the sad side but very enjoyable..i liked it! nice job  

You express yourself beautifully  

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