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aaron woodside Member
since 2001-09-26
Posts 256 |
I left my joy, six feet under and my pain I carry today one mistake; my life asunder all because I wished to stay. The mistake was made though not by myself as I prefer to claim, In all truth I see my own, just as her's we are both to blame. her's for drunken indulgence, mine for letting her drive away, and of my Love never since all because of that fateful day. Ex Animo, Aaron |
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pure_innocence Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 80Colorado, US |
How sad!!!!! I'm so sorry for your loss, but you can't think it was your fault, things happen for a reason. As awful as they sometimes are. Don't wish and wonder your life away about what coulda woulda shoulda happened or coulda been. An amazing, heartfelt write. I hope to read more from you, this hit a note in my heart. |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
I've read a lot of love poems lately, but I've noticed that you do what no one else does...you don't blame the other for your "departure" or unhappiness. A very honest approach you took. ^^ Good job. "In all truth I see my own, just as her's we are both to blame." A very heartfelt poem. You are a fine poet here at pip! Until your next post... Always, Leah Va pensiero sull' ali dorate... |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
It's never easy to lose someone I've lost one so close too I'm not gonna lie, it'll be hard the first couple of months Just remain strong, don't give up on life Thanks for sharing hi Sweets, Lizzy, Jesa, Ina, Allysa, Marie, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Chelsea, Baker, Leah, Jess, Kimmie |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Oh wow...this was so sad hun..im so sorry to hear this happened...i didnt expect the poem to end quite like this...amazing job ::hugs:: |
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Angelwings Member
since 1999-08-27
Posts 222IL, USA |
I loved it Aaron! Absolutely heartfelt. What happened? Is it true? The poem that is. Call me. We can talk. Chelsea If we're told we're bad, that's the only idea we'll ever have. Maybe if we are surrounded by beauty someday we will become what we see. |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
woah...a bit cliched aaron..  , but im not saying its a bad poem- in fact its just another take on the preventable and sad situation. "never drink and drive", weve all heard that, but ppl just dont learn do they? i hope that this was just a character write and not written out of personal experience. id hate knowing that this did in fact happen to a close friend of yours. good poem and thanks for sharing this with us see the glass crack like a flower opening |
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Alyssa
since 2001-05-30
Posts 385IM ENGAGED!!!!! |
awww sweety!im sorry...if you ever need to talk you know how to get ahold of me! i like the piece very much actually thanks for sharing "If I made you mad today, would you still love me tomorrow?"-Incubus |
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baby0508 Member
since 2001-05-16
Posts 58Moodus, Connecticut |
Wow..that is really sad. I'm not really sure what to say to that..It is really good and writing is a good way to express your feelings. keep it up. |
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aaron woodside Member
since 2001-09-26
Posts 256 |
Just so everyone knows this poem is not True. It's just a character write. It just came to me one day when I was thinking. Anyway thnx for all the replys and Chelsea sorry I ain't called in so long. Thnx Amee I'll write ya soon. I have been a little busy as of late. ex animo, Aaron |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
It's a good thing to hear that it isn't a true write. You've done a very good job of capturing the emotions. I truly thought that this was from a personal stance. I look forward to seeing many more. Thanks for the read. ~AF~ Maybe I'm just a girl...interupted. |
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