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Everlasting Love |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL 
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Everlasting Love Sitting beneath the weeping willow Starring at the waters face, which mirrors the world While the willow’s leaves whisper in the wind Gently speaking of loves long lost Upon the swift scythe of death Also known as time My hopes shattered My heart weakened My vision blurred From this fateful blow For as I searched for you In the time we would spend together I found you with him The one of whom you hated and reviled With all your heart and soul Yet now you cherish him ? For what? His stupidity? His addictions? His lies? He reeks of deception A most vile thing indeed My heart shattered My spirit broken I mearly nod to you Moving on To find this sacred place Beneath the willow’s leaves While thoughts of you flit through my mind As my spirit pulses through every pour of my body I open my eyes to see the sun piercing through the leaves Reminding me it’s not over yet It has just begun For the tiny flame of hope still burns within my heart A flame that can never Be extinguished through All the passing of time I slip in to meditation While the willow whispers Of days gone by And loves long past My heart rages through My spirit's disarray Yet I am calmed in a sense By the sanctity of this place And by the hope which Remains eternal Like my love for you Which is everlasting It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. I've learned that even when you th [This message has been edited by LoneWolf (edited 09-28-2001).] |
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pure_innocence Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 80Colorado, US |
Beautiful write. A very vivid picture you paint, and a sad, touching tale. The girl is the one missing out, not you. I loved your word choice and the mental images brought to mind, it gave me goose bumps!!! I loved it!! |
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NathanS Member
since 2001-09-27
Posts 106CA |
A very good poem indeed- excelent imagery. It really gets to your mind and your heart, makes you feel, what all good poems should do. -Nathan "Like the sun without the moon, so is a relationship with devotion." - Me "A poem should be written one time and from the heart, not the mind." - Me "What use is your heart If you can't put it into words What use is your heart If you can't share it with the one you love Don't waste your gift Given to you by the creater from above" - Me |
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xShUgArHiGhx 
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Oh how beautiful!!!! This was a gorgeous write  |
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Alyssa
since 2001-05-30
Posts 385IM ENGAGED!!!!! |
Oh wow i really felt this one, quite a wonderful write Lone, i truly enjoyed it! "I swear officer! It was PINK." |
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