navwin » Archives » Teen Poetry #5 » Letter to a broken heart
Teen Poetry #5
Post A Reply Post New Topic Letter to a broken heart Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
Jenn Cirrincione
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Elite
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107
Fl

0 posted 2001-09-26 10:24 AM


Letter to a broken heart

I tried to warn you
It was far too simple
He was just too perfect
I showed you that early on
And now all I can do is watch you weep.
I presented every sign
Pointed out all my fears
Nagging doubts
with jagged edges;
You refused to believe.
I hate to say it now-- I told you so.


And a broken heart's reply

He may have hurt me
Taken all I had and
charred it;
Smashed my soul
Stripped me bare
But I cannot say
That I was wrong
'Cause I gave my all
And to feel for him
As I have for no other
I could never regret
And it was worth it



© Copyright 2001 Jennifer Parker - All Rights Reserved
Acies
Deputy Moderator 1 Tour
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665
Twilight Zone
1 posted 2001-09-26 09:59 PM


Jenn, I'm still in the dark here
I'm just making guesses on what's going on
Well, I really don't have to know
Your poems just concern me though
Hope things do get better
Thanks for sharing

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Jesa, Ina, Allysa, Marie, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Chelsea, Baker, Leah, Jess, Kimmie

aaron woodside
Member
since 2001-09-26
Posts 256

2 posted 2001-09-26 11:35 PM


It's always worth it Jen.   It doesn't matter if it's only for a few days or for a lifetime.  Take the chance, and never listen to those who doubt it.  They don't know what they are missing.

Best wishes,
Ex Animo,
      AWood0813@charter.net

anonymousfemale
Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797
Limbo
3 posted 2001-09-27 11:32 AM


Jenndalene, you already know how much I love it and I think that you've done a really good job with this. The pain won't last forever so try to smile because you have a nice smile and remain positive no matter how crappy the outcome looks. You've always got me to talk to.  

Take care of yourself and thanks for sharing.

~AF~

"Reality is only a feeble rendering of the energy brought forth by the imagination"

FoxXena
Member
since 2001-06-13
Posts 141
where dragons play, children run free and foxes are never hunted
4 posted 2001-09-27 05:30 PM


A two sided viewpoint. Very unusual, but I like it!

~*~It is said that laughter is the shortest distance between two people...~*~
~*~I say it is the written word.~*~

peachesNcream
Senior Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears
5 posted 2001-09-28 05:59 PM


wow! i loved this piece..i know how you feel, exactly how you feel!  

~*~How can we be friends if everytime I think of you I know that's all we'll ever be~*~

anonymous albert ?
Deputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Elite
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979

6 posted 2001-09-28 09:57 PM


...on the poem i thought you did a wonderful job...very creative but with overwheming sadness...i hope you are ok...and remain a strong person as you are...take care..


Spice
Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.
7 posted 2001-10-14 10:39 PM


Okay...So I'm like 3-4 weeks behind in the  poetry section of the forums...And I've decided to Screw the newbies! I'm replying to people who have always replied to me, to my friends...HeHe...Is that mean? LOL And then whenever I get done with replying to you guys...I'll try to start fresh and reply to all from then on...We'll see though...LOL
ANYWAY
*CHEERS*
I'm so glad I started catching up...WOW! Jenn, I LOVED this...Most def. One of my fav pieces from you....I liked the whole 2 parts to the poem etc...Loved the whole Idea behind it... And the last lines "And it was worth it " HUGE effect on me. The whole poem actually was on I could REALLY relate to...The whole time my eyes were watering...*Sigh* What an awful situation....Hope all gets better, though I'm sure it won't...*Hugs* Thanks for the read though, deary....LOVED it. Take care!

Every now and then I like to stick my foot in my mouth...

Jenn Cirrincione
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Elite
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107
Fl
8 posted 2001-10-14 10:50 PM


Thanks Jesa! Wow, it's always cool to have the old stuff brought up from the bottom. I'm so glad you liked this, but I'm so sorry you relate to it... it's kind of a bummer.   You're mistaken about one thing tho, even tho it never completely fades, it DOES get better.   Thanks for the comments.

Jenn

"I want love on my own terms; after everything I've ever learned. Me, I carry too much baggage..."

Marshalzu
Deputy Moderator 10 ToursDeputy Moderator 10 ToursDeputy Moderator 5 ToursDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Elite
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681
Lurking
9 posted 2001-10-15 10:05 AM


Wow Jenn this is amazing, I like how you give a two sided view point. Hope things fade fast for you  
Andrew

"Ph33r Me I eat N00bies Ph0R bReakFAsT"
- Replying might be your only hope of getting noticed -

Jenn Cirrincione
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Elite
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107
Fl
10 posted 2001-10-15 10:12 AM


Thanks andrew.  

"I want love on my own terms; after everything I've ever learned. Me, I carry too much baggage..."

Jeremiah Johnson
Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
11 posted 2001-11-08 01:09 PM


i love the way you take this into two parts. its great reminds me of my crossroads poems. don't ever stop writing cause you have alot to say.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


vixengrl04
Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495
East Haddam, CT
12 posted 2001-11-09 07:43 PM


In the end, it's *always* worth it.  Because no matter how strong the pain is in the end, it can *never* wash away the love, or the memories that you shared.  

~*Nikki*~

~*I'd rather you hate me for what I am than love me for what I'm not.*~

Local Parasite
Deputy Moderator 10 Tours
Member Elite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg
13 posted 2001-11-09 08:06 PM


I'm going to repeat that it was really cool that you broke this in two parts  
I thought this was a well thought-through poem and it's different from what you usually do because the form is given more attention.
But you did an awesome job and I love it!  It's my favourite poem by you

Theo

K. Rebel
Junior Member
since 2001-10-21
Posts 40
San Juan, PR
14 posted 2001-11-10 12:01 PM


Great way to close a poem. I loved it!
Irish Rose
Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263

15 posted 2001-11-10 05:06 PM


we learn something from every love.....even if it is just one thing..we learn.. and yes, it's always worth it because we are worth it!

Kathleen
nickname "Kay"
also wrote as The Lady of Shallot
"be true to yourself"

Skyfire
Deputy Moderator 10 ToursDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Elite
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381
Riding
16 posted 2001-11-10 06:17 PM


Very good!!! That's my reply to people who ask me why I fell for the guy I did! Very very well written!

~I am a computer genius... Hey! How do you turn this thing on?!?

~Love me because I am Rhonda

xShUgArHiGhx
Deputy Moderator 10 ToursDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Elite
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs
17 posted 2001-11-13 01:49 PM


This poem's format rocked!!! I absolutely loved it, very unique   great job!

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

TopGunLauren
Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718
California
18 posted 2001-11-13 06:21 PM


Wow....I really liked this one keep up the great work.
  Lauren

Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Teen Poetry #5 » Letter to a broken heart

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary