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Jenn Cirrincione
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0 posted 2001-09-23 08:25 AM


Been taking my time;
being independent.
Living this free existance,
Taking hold of my life.

There are many;
to fill this void.
To lessen the ache,
and take up space.

But still sometimes;
between other's kisses,
I can't keep away,
and I think of you.

With this world so hard;
Now turbulent and torn,
I want what I once had.
Stability of love-in an uncertain world.

"In the words of a broken heart, it's just emotion taking me over; you'll never see me fall apart, in the words of a broken heart."

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1 posted 2001-09-23 10:14 AM


"I want what I once had.
Stability of love-in an uncertain world."

*sigh* that's really sad!!  
But what good comes of stability? You become less able to experience those major highs or really lows because of the comfort zone. You lose that unexplainable element of life and then what are you meant to do? That's right! Nothing! BAH! *walks away*

Now the piece itself I like for what it represents. There seems to be more feeling in this than your other ones. Well done. You rock.  

Keep smiling, chicky and remember, Superman loves you.  

~AF~

Kookaburra sits in the old gum tree, merry, merry king of the bush is he. Laugh! kookaburra LAGUH! Kookaburra how gay your life must be.

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2 posted 2001-09-23 01:17 PM


oh this is wonderful  
very good  

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3 posted 2001-09-23 09:42 PM


Lizzy- Thanks sweetie...! Hehehe superman you say? I can get his number, eh?   As to your comments, I know stability takes away highs and lows and makes us comfortable in semi-monotony... but maybe I'm more ready for that than I thought I was. It's nice to have someone to call your own; to know where your home is, and where you belong. *sigh* Making me think you bad, bad girl...!   It's all good tho, one should be thinking every now and again. Thanks for your reply.

Sea- You're very kind. Thank you.  

"In the words of a broken heart, it's just emotion taking me over; you'll never see me fall apart, in the words of a broken heart."

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4 posted 2001-10-01 07:44 PM


Your last 2 lines just hit hard
That is just a wonderful line
I love it
be strong Jenn, okies?
*hugs*

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Jesa, Ina, Allysa, Marie, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Chelsea, Baker, Leah, Jess, Kimmie

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5 posted 2001-10-01 07:59 PM


powerful, Jenn and a VERY realistic piece...i think you did an wonderful job on protraying this...*picks up his fork* more please?
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