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Unhappily Ever After. |
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TeChNo KiTtY Junior Member
since 2001-09-20
Posts 22Wisconsin, USA |
shimmering stars. glistening blades of grass, in the moonlight. eyes sparkling. you sing me your song. i fall deeper in love, with you. eerie silence. i turn to look, seeing no one. standing beside my own reflection. my body shuddering. shivering with cold chills. wrap my arms around myself, realizing i'm alone. "i tried so hard, and got so far..but in the end, it doesn't even matter.." ~Linkin Park [This message has been edited by TeChNo KiTtY (edited 09-21-2001).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Wowness, very nicely written here. I really liked this one a lot. It had so much feeling and the ending was so sad. Very nicely written!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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TeChNo KiTtY Junior Member
since 2001-09-20
Posts 22Wisconsin, USA |
thanks dopey..poetry has always been the greatest form of release for me. glad you liked it. "i tried so hard, and got so far..but in the end, it doesn't even matter.." |
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Alyssa
since 2001-05-30
Posts 385IM ENGAGED!!!!! |
*is still laughing at dopey's "wowness"* thats one weriod word yo... i really liked this poem...it kinda gave me this "eerie feeling" hehe very good job! "I swear officer! It was PINK." |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
"my body shuddering. shivering with cold chills. wrap my arms around myself, realizing i'm alone." That part kicks ass!! I really enjoyed reading this for reasons that cannot be said.  Thanks for the read. Keep sharing.  ~AF~ Please put waste in a bin |
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katherine Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Canberra Australia |
this poem is awesome. It leaves you feeling eerry... |
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zarina Member
since 2001-05-19
Posts 180 |
ohh this is sad... I'm in that kinda mood now. Shouldn't be here at pip reading sad poems..Only makes me feel worse. heh.. but anyway, very well written. I'm always myslef. Isn't that enough for you? |
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TeChNo KiTtY Junior Member
since 2001-09-20
Posts 22Wisconsin, USA |
thanks everyone, for the compliments and sharing my sorrow. (and sorry if it makes you feel bad! although that shows you can relate, thanks) "i tried so hard, and got so far..but in the end, it doesn't even matter.." |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
wow, this was sad, but i can TOTAlly relate cuz thats kinda what i'm going thro right now...so i hope u feel better *hugs*  Did u ever have the feeling that he meant everything 2 u, yet u meant nothing 2 him?..... |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Now this I really like I'm really amazed and in awe Beautiful words and a saddening ending Hope things do get better for you Ya know, you got friends here in pip to talk to Well, we don't you really, but maybe on day Thanks for sharing again *applauds* hi Sweets, Lizzy, Jesa, Ina, Allysa, Marie, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Chelsea, Baker, Leah, Jess, Kimmie |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Aww... that's so sad! But so well written! Right on  Maybe in order to understand mankind, we have to look at the word itself: "Mankind". Basically, it's made up of two separate words - "mank" and "ind". |
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