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xShUgArHiGhx

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tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

0 posted 2001-09-20 01:58 PM

You force me to rise,
From my bed full of protection.
I cant face the world today,
Me being so far from perfection.
You wont leave my sight,
Standing next to my door.
Don’t u understand??
I cant deal with this anymore!!
Tears fall now,
Slowly from my frosty blue eyes.
A cold haze came over them,
It was really no surprise.
Happiness was always out of reach,
Always an inch from my fingertip.
I could never grasp it,
I could only invision it.
I don’t think I can be w/u anymore,
Im not so sure it’s the right thing to do.
Im not happy either way,
Why bring you down to?
You gave me the happiest days,
Forever the memories will be engraved in my heart.
You gave me the coldest days,
Where the sky grew threatening and dark.
I cant give you what you want,
You don’t have what I need.
My worst fear came true,
And I fell on my knees.
I’m not strong enough for your challenges,
Im not prepared for your actions.
You tore my shield down,
Now cryings my only reaction.
I just want to be alone,
I cant see you anymore.
Im tired of chasing you and repairing myself,
So please just close the door…

TeChNo KiTtY
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since 2001-09-20

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Wisconsin, USA

1 posted 2001-09-20 02:05 PM

wow..that was beautiful. i could feel every word. i know exactly how these feelings feel. it hurts to love so much you feel helpless, especially when you know you're hurting yourself. great work

keep it up.

"i tried so hard, and got so far..but in the end, it doesn't even matter.."
~Linkin Park

punkrockerrobin

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since 2001-05-15

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2 posted 2001-09-21 12:23 PM

great poem very well written.
robin

bye lizzy,javi,acire,cherish,SEA,vicky,laura,andrea,jessa and anyone else i forgot i will be back to torment you soon muhahahahahahaha

xShUgArHiGhx

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3 posted 2001-09-21 07:40 AM

Thanks guys

Dopey Dope

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4 posted 2001-09-21 04:14 PM

Well done here shugar. I fancied the poem muchly

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

anonymousfemale
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5 posted 2001-09-22 03:42 AM

The ending is fantastic. It reminds me of that movie Sliding Doors when gwenny tells him to walk through the door and close it behind him.

Anyway, nicely expressed. One thing is that it was off in some parts. other than that, great work.

Thanks for sharing.

~AF~

Please put waste in a bin
2001 McDonalds Corporation
Printed in Australia (12913)

[This message has been edited by anonymousfemale (edited 09-23-2001).]

katherine
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6 posted 2001-09-23 01:58 AM

it hurts just to read it. It's a really well written poem good job.

zarina
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7 posted 2001-09-23 04:16 AM

Very good

I can relate to this...

I'm always myslef. Isn't that enough for you?

Jenn Cirrincione

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8 posted 2001-09-23 08:27 AM

Awwww...

I don't know what to say to this

I really can relate tho, and I think it was well written!!

Jenn

"In the words of a broken heart, it's just emotion taking me over; you'll never see me fall apart, in the words of a broken heart."

xShUgArHiGhx

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9 posted 2001-09-24 09:53 AM

Thank you everyone

Anonymous--Ya kno its funny i neva even saw Sliding doors

TopGunLauren
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10 posted 2001-09-25 01:40 AM

Wow....another beautiful poem but your poems always are.I loved this one it was very well written keep up the awsome work.
Lauren

xShUgArHiGhx

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11 posted 2001-09-25 07:45 AM

Thank you Lauren

anonymousfemale
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12 posted 2001-09-25 01:15 PM

You should see it. It's a good movie.

*ZAP*
*ZAP*

DancinQueen

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13 posted 2001-09-25 04:24 PM

aww babe this was beautiful..very sad. But i know hor youre feeling, as always

Keep your chin up..and remember: Guy-Bashing Party hehe

*dq

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Alyssa

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14 posted 2001-09-25 08:14 PM

very nice, i really enjoyed

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SunShine913

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15 posted 2001-09-25 11:31 PM

oooo you gave the chills .. but very very nice i loved it!!!!

!~Andrea~!
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lonely*soul
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16 posted 2001-09-26 08:08 AM

wow, i really like this alot and i can totally relate! more so to the part that goes:

Happiness was always out of reach,
Always an inch from my fingertip.
I could never grasp it,
I could only invision it.

anyways, awsome job!

the road to fame is long, and theres no escalator..but dang, ill burn sum calories getting there! hehe

xShUgArHiGhx

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17 posted 2001-09-26 10:58 PM

I've heard so many mixed reviews about Sliding Doors..lol i dunno which one to believe..but the guy bashing party is constantly on my mind..thanks for the idea kiley!! Everything seems to be getting a lil better..i actually bought him an expensive gray shirt from STRUCTURE..arent i such a good gf lol yea right..n e way thanks everyone for reading and replying! im glad you all enjoyed

Acies

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18 posted 2001-10-08 10:13 AM

you've expressed yourself beautifully though it is melancholy and full of lamentation. Hope things work out. thanks for sharing

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Jesa, Ina, Allysa, Marie, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Chelsea, Baker, Leah, Jess, Kimmie

Skyfire

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19 posted 2001-10-08 11:31 PM

Oh that is so sad, and so good! Oh wow, I'm speechless...

If you define cowardice as running away and screaming at the first sign of danger, then yes, Mister Brave Man, I guess I am a coward.

NathanS
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20 posted 2001-10-08 11:49 PM

An awesome piece of work, i must say!
You seem to write nothing but totally kick butt poetry!! Library for sure!

-Dreys
I am a flying patato,
A Patato of flight,
bare your teeth,
im coming to fight

HeAvEnS AnGeL
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The Hot Girl From Canada

21 posted 2001-10-08 11:54 PM

i loved this!!! it's going in my library

xShUgArHiGhx

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22 posted 2001-10-09 07:45 AM

Thanks everyone for your replies! Im glad you all liked it

Honey
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23 posted 2001-10-10 05:18 PM

I really liked this.
Smile you will feel better

xShUgArHiGhx

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24 posted 2001-10-11 09:55 AM

Thanks honey

Spice
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25 posted 2001-10-20 01:18 PM

Michele!

I'm absolutely blown away by this piece...I loved it bunches upon bunches...The emotions in here are so powerful and so simply, yet wonderfully expressed...GREAT JOB!

Every now and then I like to stick my foot in my mouth...

anonymous albert ?

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26 posted 2001-10-20 02:38 PM

powerful piece, hope all is well, Michele...enjoyed your writing, as always...and wonderful job with the poem.

"This little light of mine...im gonna let it shine. *sighs* Let it shine...let it shine. Let it shine."

shadow974
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27 posted 2001-10-20 07:44 PM

Great poem, reminds me of some thing that happened in the past, filled with lots of emoition

xShUgArHiGhx

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28 posted 2001-10-23 09:53 AM

Thanks everyone for your replies!! I appreciate it

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

gracianna
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A 14 year hell

29 posted 2002-02-18 02:29 PM

wow...

I give a whole new meaning to the word 'sad.'

knightlyshadows
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obscured vision

30 posted 2002-02-18 11:01 PM

woah im glad someone bumped this back up to give me the chance to read it.
this was just full of emotions and just squeezed my heart tight Michele. you did very well on this and i hope bumping this doesnt bring back bad memories for you. *hugs to you* and hope all is well hun.
..tiff..

“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

I know Im not perfect but I can smile
& I hope that you c this heart behind my tired eyes

sleepymoongirl
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31 posted 2002-02-18 11:38 PM

wow i feel like that all the time if you figure out how to deal please tell me i hope you feel better soon letting go someone who you hold close to your heart is a hard thing to do

as u go in life there will be ur hardships it is up to u if it makes u or breaks u.

xShUgArHiGhx

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32 posted 2002-02-19 12:45 PM

Wow guys..im honestly so suprised to see this bumped back up here but im also very happy

Thanks to all who read it and i hope you all enjoyed it

It hasnt brought back any memories that are bad b/c not much has changed since i wrote that in september...as for figuring out how to make things better and dealing with it i think only time can tell..

Thanks again everyone!

mE & cHrIsTiNe GaVe A WhOlE nEw mEaNiNg tO ThE wOrD "iNcOgNiTo"

xerxes
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33 posted 2002-02-19 01:52 AM

very profound, beautifully written, i believe that you have created a deeply moving story of countless souls and condensed it into a realistic landscape where only few dare walk. I'm seen walking there from time to time, next time I'll look for you. wonderful work.
-Xerxes

BrokenAngel
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34 posted 2002-02-19 12:45 PM

I've been gone for a while and to be able to come back and see this poem, wow. Compleatly took my breath away. I've been in the same shoes baby doll, all you can do is grit your teeth and keep going, just remember, it can only get better.

---Night Angel

keoni
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35 posted 2002-02-19 03:01 PM

Another good one. I have someone in mind when I read this one. I can relate. Hope things are OK. I know how this feels and it sucks
Jon

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"Sometimes it takes a painful loss to realize you are free"- Bouncing Souls

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