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the_rescue Member
since 2001-05-23
Posts 316Japan |
Slain Spirit broken dreams reality changed not how it seems things dillusioned things distraught another illusion of what was taught Babylon the great how hard is your fall with a twist of fate you come to a crawl A nation in dismay left wounded & hurt remove the decay push away the dirt united we come together we fall hear the war's hum fear the evil call vengence belongs to us or so we claim lets cause some fuss uphold our fame We are big we are strong we will defeat all those who are wrong every evil we meet we wont back down that's what we say we'll act like a clown put on a good play keep the world pure from evil and pain not totally sure of those to be slain Oh America the great how mighty are you erase all hate that's what you must do From sea to shining sea your empire must reign as far as they can see you're the cause of your pain is our pain self inflicted have the virtues we portraid kept us restricted was this the price to be paid? Nothing against they US @ all I think since the horror on tuesday I have actually had a new outlook on our Nation I just think this was brought on by ourselve's, for every giant that ever existed has fallen Babylon, Rome, Greece, Hitler's army...you think one would learn from history's mistakes so will we stand or will we become another one of those gnastly statistics. we fall like the stars then rise like the sun..Repentence.Forgiveness.We are blame worthy hold us to our wrongs..but don't hold our wrongs against us |
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punkrockerrobin 
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
woohoo i'm actually the first to reply! jimmy this was sad. we are strong if we join together. i wish you would email me when you are online i miss you! anyways i must go before i start crying. robin bye lizzy,javi,acire,cherish,SEA,vicky,laura, and anyone else i forgot i will be back to torment you soon muhahahahahahaha |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
hey, this was a really good poem. i mean, i might not agree with some of it, but that doesn't matter right now. rhyme scheme was full of greatness, and the words flowed together really good. great work :-) -fear- i'm a penguin! i'm a penguin! i'm a cute lil penguiiiin! i'm a penguin i'm a penguin! i eat FISH!--tis the pretty penguin song |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I thought this was a really good poem. It really reflected how you feel...i dont even wanna think about half of these horrible things right now though... |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Oh now this is a great piece of writing. Reading all the other points of view became a tad tedious after a while but this fresh approach really caught my eye. Indeed we have to look to history for the mistakes and more than likely for the solutions too. However, what was solved then may not be able to apply the same logic now. It ran through pretty well. Just out in a few places. Other than that, I loved each and every moment of reading it. To the library she goes!!  ~AF~ "Hi there, can I relay a sonnet your way?" |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
A lot of truth. Well said, and well done....I loved the poem.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
A lot of truth. Well said, and well done....I loved the poem. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
yes, to be able to move forward, we have to look to our past. I agree with that. But I do believe that another lesson learned from the past is not to let tyrants go about their way without paying for it. Adolf Hitler is the prime example of it. Yes he was warned by France and England not to even restructure it's army or suffer the consequences. Remember that this is part of the Treaty of Versailles. What did they do, nothing. He restructured in 1933 when he became the fuhrer. After Germany annexed a some countries like Austria, they also didn't do anything after all the threats to Germany. All this lead to Spetember 1st, 1939 which is the start of World War II. It took 6 yrs before anything was done to try to stop Germany and it was too late then. I guess there's different ways of looking at the situation, but I do give credit to NATO and would 100 percent back their decision on this matter. In terms of US foreign policy bringing Sept 11 on itself. I don't believe that at all. No one deserves anything like what happened. hi Sweets, Lizzy, Jesa, Ina, Allysa, Marie, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Chelsea, Baker, Leah, Jess, Kimmie [This message has been edited by acire (edited 10-04-2001).] |
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