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zarina
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0 posted 2001-09-15 06:33 AM


she's on the floor
in a room with no door
her hands are so small
her skin looks so pale
her lips shivers
her mouth is dry
she's empty
she seems cold

And she - she is beautiful alone

This is nothing
This is nowhere
her hair is navy blue
her movements are rare
her eyes is transparent
she's dim
she's a shadow

And she - she is beautiful alone

*-*-* So.. my first post in a while.
well.. I  don't have anything to say about this..*-*-*

I'm always myslef. Isn't that enough for you?

© Copyright 2001 zarina - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-09-15 08:15 AM


great poem. keep up the good work.
robin

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Delirious_Smurf
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2 posted 2001-09-15 03:51 PM


I absolutely loved this!
I loved the way you wrote it and the poem itself was great

Def. a keeper!

Who you are and who you will be is right in the palm of your hand.

lil_pwheeler
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3 posted 2001-09-15 04:54 PM


Abosoultely sweet. A lil strange but that adds depth, Cant wait for more.
silvrduck
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4 posted 2001-09-15 08:49 PM


Hey this is great! I really liked it  
keep up the great work!
Sarah


ps. I like your signature too

*love is blind; friendship closes its eyes.*

Spice
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5 posted 2001-09-16 04:03 AM


HURA!!!! *CHEERS*
Oh how I've MISSED your writing!!!
Such a wonderful post to come back with too! So filled with meaning, so deep...Oh I loved it! Beautiful alone...

United we stand, Divided we fall.
Never say die.

anonymousfemale
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6 posted 2001-09-17 03:21 AM


Whoa!! EXCELLENT!! It says so much and I just love the line, "And she - she is beautiful alone". Fantastic work, Carina. Great to see you writing again.

I'm looking forward to seeing many more.  

~AF~

"Who needs enemies,
When you've got friends like these
Caught between me and myself again"
Motor Ace - Enemies

zarina
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7 posted 2001-09-17 03:58 AM


aww thanks alot  
I'm glad you liked it..  
And spice, I should really talk to you some day...

I'm always myslef. Isn't that enough for you?

fearing-laughter
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8 posted 2001-09-20 12:46 PM


zaaarinnnnnaaa
hey hey we're both back! yay!  i liked this poem, it was pretty surreal, but good.  it reminded me of an author i know...you ever read Francesca Lia Block??  she's a pretty good author...anywayz i liked this poem.  yay for you being back.  
-bergundy (fear)-

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9 posted 2001-09-20 11:05 AM


Girl this was outstanding!!!!!

I really liked this a lot i dont even know what to say  

chasing rain
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10 posted 2001-09-20 08:24 PM


Beautiful words, C/Zarina. ^^
You're becoming quite the poet here at pip!

++ Leah ++

Va pensiero sull' ali dorate...

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11 posted 2001-10-04 12:42 PM


absolutely a masterpiece
I love it a lot
amazing, simply amazing
*applauds*

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Jesa, Ina, Allysa, Marie, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Chelsea, Baker, Leah, Jess, Kimmie

zarina
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12 posted 2001-10-05 03:47 AM


thank you very much indeed..  

And fear - do I really remind you of Francesca Lia Block? waw! that's really cool. she's incredible. I feel honoured (or whatever the word is.. heh heh)

I'm always myslef. Isn't that enough for you?

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