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Spine Grinder
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Standing In Silence...

0 posted 2001-09-12 05:45 PM


just venting, so if u dont like it, it doesnt matter really...


You've taken away my best friend,
will your complaining never end?
I've never felt this way before,
my feelings of trust are so insecure.

You've angered me like I've never felt,
I'm so mad, I cant find myself.
You've stretched my nerves so very thin,
All these emotions are making my head spin.

No matter how hard I try,
I can't seem to find out why.
I just want to get up, and walk out the door,
I feel like I don't even know you anymore.

As I watch the full moon rise,
I try to figure out, what it is about you I dispise.
I don't know what it is about you,
And I don't think I'm going to pull through.

As I soon find out, I just don't care,
it seems like your being so unfair.
I still can't believe this is happening, that this is real,
I don't know how to love, just how to feel.....

And I'd... give it all away
Just to have somewhere to go to...
Give it all away...
To have someone to come home to ...~Linkin Park

© Copyright 2001 Staci Weidner - All Rights Reserved
keoni
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1 posted 2001-09-12 05:47 PM


This was a good post.  I thought the ending was especially powerful. Great job of venting
I just noticed, this is post 700 for me. Woo Hoo
Jon

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine
"Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur

[This message has been edited by keoni (edited 09-12-2001).]

FoxXena
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2 posted 2001-09-12 06:58 PM


That is the question that we have to ask ourselves, about what happened yesterday. It's a very expressive poem.

~*~It is said that laughter is the shortest distance between two people...~*~
~*~I say it is the written word.~*~

anonymousfemale
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Posts 2797
Limbo
3 posted 2001-09-13 04:06 AM


"As I soon find out, I just don't care,
it seems like your being so unfair.
I still can't believe this is happening, that this is real,
I don't know how to love, just how to feel....."

Amazing. It's so sad too but try to keep strong and you'll pull through. I liked the rhyme and it ran through pretty well.

Good job.  

~AF~

"Kelly's my Hero!" "No, Kelly's your heroine." "Kelly has heroin??" "What?"

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4 posted 2001-09-13 10:08 AM


This was absolutely extraordinary!!! Such powerful words here...::hugs::
Spine Grinder
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since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...
5 posted 2001-09-13 03:46 PM


wow, thanks 4 the replies, i'm glad u liked it...

And I'd... give it all away
Just to have somewhere to go to...
Give it all away...
To have someone to come home to ...~Linkin Park

peachesNcream
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since 2001-08-21
Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears
6 posted 2001-09-13 09:32 PM


Hey chickie~! This was a really good poem...I think I like it the best outa all the ones I read before of yours. I know exactly how you feel so don't worry your #1 NBH will always be here mon! lol   Keep posting and get all your emotions out. It helps so much it's not even funny. I'm going through kinda the same thing as you with my mom and ya know..the guy I like *Sam*..don't worry babes I'm here and I'm not going anywhere anytime soon. lylas ~Jess

~*~Life is only worth living once if you've found someone worth dying for~*~
~*~drink, eat, smoke, blade, sleep~*~

Delirious_Smurf
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since 2001-08-08
Posts 90
Nothingness,P.R.
7 posted 2001-09-13 09:41 PM


That was a really good poem  
Hope you feel better

Who you are and who you will be is right in the palm of your hand.

Dopey Dope
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8 posted 2001-09-21 04:21 PM


Very well done on this poem. I really liked it a lot.  

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

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