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GhostWriter_6
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since 2001-09-03

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0 posted 2001-09-12 12:31 PM

“18 Years”

18 years of my life I feel like I’ve wasted,
Did I throw it away or did I just misplace it.
It’s like my life has been one big play and I was the only actor,
But no one paid attention to the performance so my dreams of fame were shattered,
Nevertheless, throughout my life I was destined to repeat the same pattern,
After a while it seemed like none of it really mattered.
I’ve wasted plenty of time trying to find my own identity,
But the harder I tried the only thing that was stopping me, was I my worst enemy.
I never had many friends; I usually kept to myself and stayed alone,
I felt like an outcast, or like a king that had been dethroned,
How does someone that tries so hard to do things right, end up being so wrong.
Feelings of loneliness, hatred, and pain, God please give me a sign,
Is the life that I’m living really supposed to be mine?
If it’s not, let me die then resurrect me so my real life can begin,
So I won’t travel this road of pain and sorrow again.

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

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1 posted 2001-09-12 01:39 PM

"I’ve wasted plenty of time trying to find my own identity,
But the harder I tried the only thing that was stopping me, was I my worst enemy."

I really like those lines above a lot...i feel like most of us are our own worst enemy...its a shame...i hope things get better for you...::hugs::

keoni
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since 2000-10-16

Posts 850
Up in the mountains in the NFC

2 posted 2001-09-12 01:44 PM

I know how life can hurt alot. I went through my first 18 years and it was hard. A whole lot of things change though when you graduate , some good, some bad. But I think you need to worry about your future and say to hell with the past problems. It's the only thing that works. Great poem. I know exactly how you feel
Jon

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine
"Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

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3 posted 2001-09-12 02:03 PM

It sounds like you don't need to go so far as to "die", but a change is in the offing for you, so be ready for it, and embrace all that you can. Yours is just beginning, and I would think you are about ready to take it on!

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

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4 posted 2001-09-12 03:12 PM

I could feel all the emotion in this. it really tugged on my heart. I feel for you.
"If it’s not, let me die then resurrect me so my real life can begin,
So I won’t travel this road of pain and sorrow again."
Those lines are so strong and I felt connected with them the most out of all. Keep strong and keep writing.

~AF~

"Kelly's my Hero!" "No, Kelly's your heroine." "Kelly has heroin??" "What?"

Spice
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since 2001-04-13

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Resting in my cardboard box.

5 posted 2001-09-16 03:18 AM

Nice ending, and I liked the line about feeling dethroned as well.
Very emotional piece here, hope things get better.

United we stand, Divided we fall.
Never say die.

punkrockerrobin

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since 2001-05-15

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Sparks, NV

6 posted 2001-09-16 03:21 AM

good poem i liked it. keep up the good work.
robin

bye lizzy,javi,acire,cherish,SEA,vicky,laura, and anyone else i forgot i will be back to torment you soon muhahahahahahaha

Domzi
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since 2001-09-08

Posts 288
New York (BK)

7 posted 2001-09-17 06:20 AM

You know I was gonna reply (lol)!
This poem is mad deep, and I can
tell that it's written from your
own experience. But, like I say,
Keep your head up.
Much Love- Dominique

As my borough has always stated- Do or Die.

Chel
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since 2000-07-01

Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA

8 posted 2001-09-17 05:52 PM

I thought this piece was very realistic. Keep up the great work.

Chel

"True friends stab you in the front."
"You are special and unique in your own way." "Your FAITH is all you need"

SunShine913

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since 2001-08-19

Posts 211
Italy but from NC

9 posted 2001-09-17 06:38 PM

"How does someone that tries so hard to do things right, end up being so wrong"

I really liked this poem .. this is the frist one i have read of yours i hope to read more so you keep writing and i will keep reading

!~Andrea~!
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fullest*
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