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pharon
Member

since 1999-11-13

Posts 251
alabama

0 posted 2001-09-10 09:19 PM

confusion IsetsN
  as anger tries to
consume my every
         thought?

resentment IsetsN
  as a tear tries to
invade my spotless
            face?

people surrMEound
  as fear tries to
steal what's left of my
           life?

noises surrMEound
  as I try to
sort things out in my
          mind?

    alone

cherish
Senior Member

since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

1 posted 2001-09-10 09:36 PM

....wow....
im totally speechless, no ok here come the words...i loved the darkness of it all, it seem to have a sumwhat sad tone to it too. i loved the format- very cool and unique, espcially the way you inserted words into each other. a very cool write pharon. well done!

- I stayed up all night playing poker with tarot cards. I got a full
house and four people died.

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

2 posted 2001-09-11 12:10 PM

awesome...but what is this suppose to spell out? "IsetsN"..

...well anyways..."surrMEound" that is damn great!...and the ending quite powerful.

if i die before i wake...i pray the Lord my soul to take - when thugs cry-

pharon
Member

since 1999-11-13

Posts 251
alabama

3 posted 2001-09-11 12:27 PM

IsetsN = sets in....thanx for the reply's you guys! hopefully i'll be on more often but unfortunately i don't have much time b/c i just started college and it's starting to sink in that i should probably study sometimes.

me

punkrockerrobin

Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 1180
Sparks, NV

4 posted 2001-09-11 02:22 AM

good poem keep up the good work!!i really liked it.
robin

Things I Have Learned I've learned that you cannot make someone love you. All you can do is stalk them and hope they panic and give in

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

5 posted 2001-09-15 02:05 AM

Awesome job...I too loved the strange play with words/letters...It confused me at first, but I figured it out...Much enjoyed.

You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did.

anonymousfemale
Member Elite

since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

6 posted 2001-09-15 01:25 PM

To be honest, the subject matter was great but the woven words annoyed the hell out of me. Personal opinion though.

I did like the piece for that it represented.

Thanks for sharing.

~AF~

"Kelly's my Hero!" "No, Kelly's your heroine." "Kelly has heroin??" "What?"

Delirious_Smurf
Member

since 2001-08-08

Posts 90
Nothingness,P.R.

7 posted 2001-09-15 03:39 PM

Very cool poem

I liked it loads.
The weird word games baffled me but then I got it.

Who you are and who you will be is right in the palm of your hand.

lil_pwheeler
Junior Member

since 2001-07-14

Posts 39
here

8 posted 2001-09-15 04:57 PM

Depressing, dark, strange thats my kind of poem!

No one dies a virgin, life screws us all

silvrduck
Member

since 2000-11-05

Posts 146

9 posted 2001-09-15 09:21 PM

Wow

that's it.

*the chains which have held us are only the chains which we've made*
~jewel

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

10 posted 2001-10-04 02:30 PM

Wow, i love you pharon haha.
Your poetry is awesome. I simply just love it. Another well written creative masterpiece.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

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