»
Archives
»
Teen Poetry #5
»
Through These Tears.
| Teen Poetry #5 |
|
Through These Tears. |
|
|
Hallucination Member
since 2001-03-18
Posts 419 |
I feel the pain everyday it touches my life all the time. It hurts, gets harder to breathe broken through these years through these tears. It is tearing up my heart as turns the page, as love age. I cry like a new born child wishing you where here, through these tears. I keep seeing your face keep reminiscing your eyes through these tears. I long for your embrace long for the light of your smile through these tears. Memories keeps breaking apart keeps falling, of the wall. Promises fading away still I'll always care, throiugh these tears. I keep seeing your face keep reminiscing your eyes through these tears. I long for your embrace long for the light of your smile through these tears. It used to feel so good melting hearts and lost dreams. Tell me why... whatever happened to eternity. I feel the pain everyday it touches my life, all the time. I keep seeing your face keep reminiscing your eyes through these tears. I long for your embrace long for the light of your smile through these tears. |
||
| © Copyright 2001 Brian Eggertsen - All Rights Reserved | |||
xShUgArHiGhx 
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This was such a beautiful piece...absolutely wonderful. It was so sad but the sadness seeped through it somehow...it was great...excellent job and i hope you feel better soon ::hugs:: |
||
|
anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
<---- Got goosebumps well this has taken care of the good mood and filled me with an overwhelming sadness.  Your repetition was a good effect and drummed the message of the piece in well. Wow...so sad... Thanks for the read. I look forward to more.  ~AF~ "Kelly's my Hero!" "No, Kelly's your heroine." "Kelly has heroin??" "What?" |
||
|
Poet Unknown Member
since 2001-08-14
Posts 140Missouri |
it was a really good poem, good job Do as you please....strike forth down upon your knees...Darkness Falls on Those Without Souls |
||
|
Domzi Member
since 2001-09-08
Posts 288New York (BK) |
This poem was nice. I really felt your "tears". Keep up the good work. As my borough has always stated- Do or Die. |
||
|
TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Your poem is awsome I could almost feel what you were trying to express in your poem.Keep up the awsome work I love this poem. Lauren |
||
|
cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
ahhhhhh....i liked this one lots...its sad too , you did a wonderful job of expressing your feelins here. thanks for sharing - I stayed up all night playing poker with tarot cards. I got a full |
||
|
anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
*sigh*...that HIT me home. if i die before i wake...i pray the Lord my soul to take - when thugs cry- |
||
punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
good poem keep up the good work!!i really liked it.this onem ade me cry. robin Things I Have Learned I've learned that you cannot make someone love you. All you can do is stalk them and hope they panic and give in |
||
|
FoxXena Member
since 2001-06-13
Posts 141where dragons play, children run free and foxes are never hunted |
During these times of trial, we got to look for the bright side, however far it may be. ~*~It is said that laughter is the shortest distance between two people...~*~ |
||
|
lilibeelee Member
since 2001-07-12
Posts 143 |
I like this poem alot...It shows great emotions very well done... Lili : ) |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
