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~sugarpie313~
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0 posted 2001-09-09 07:25 PM


Can't you see I don't have a guy?
It's not very hard to tell,
Can't you pull a few strings for me
Just this once?

I've never had great luck with guys
i guess you'd say "it's just His plan"
But you'd think after 16 years,
He would find someone else to torment.

All I want is to meet a guy
We don't have to date,
I just want someone I can chill with
And do mushy stuff with
(But not too mushy of course).

So please God, let me meet a guy.
For just one night, that's all I beg of you,
And I'll make sure I get his number.
That's all I'm asking.

Oh and if it's not too much trouble,
Could you make him cute?

"i'm supergirl, and i'm here to save the world, but i wanna know, who's gonna save me" - WNBA Commercial

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cherish
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1 posted 2001-09-09 11:20 PM


lol this was hillarious...really really cute too...*sighs*..you'll find the guy val, one day you will- and when you do you'll sumtimes wish for your bachelorette days once again.. ..cute poem i enjoyed it heaps|

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2 posted 2001-09-10 12:41 PM


This was by far one the cutest poems I have ever read.  I promise THE BOY WILL COME I cant tell you when...but he'll be there....
~Nikki~

Smile!!  You never know who may be falling in love with it...

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3 posted 2001-09-10 08:05 AM


LOL I LOVED THIS POEM!!! It was the cutest poem ever and it was so funny...lol Im sorry he's not dont tormenting you hun!!! Dont worry...everything has its time and place  
anonymousfemale
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4 posted 2001-09-10 11:04 AM


The ending on this was very cute. Good job. But one thing, don't sit around waiting for him, do what us psycho chickys do and go out and find him. If you want him cute, go grab him youself. They'll never just appear on your doorstep one day.  

OK, enough ranting. Thanks for sharing and keep writing.

~AF~

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Poet Unknown
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5 posted 2001-09-10 03:52 PM


haha this was funny, unusual one for me to read but it was good

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Spice
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6 posted 2001-09-15 01:45 AM


Cute ending indeed.
I think the charming level couldn't have been greatly increased if this rhymed...But it's fine the way it is as well..So either way...
HeHeHe, I'm just LOVING the last line..

You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did.

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7 posted 2001-09-15 05:55 AM


hehehe this was so cute hey when you find this guy can i have his number to?lol!great poem i really liked it!! keep up the good work.
robin

Things I Have Learned I've learned that you cannot make someone love you. All you can do is stalk them and hope they panic and give in

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8 posted 2001-09-29 12:19 PM


ha ha ha ha lol
I love the ending of the poem
Hey, beggars can't be choosers   just kidding
Stop looking and you'll bump into him one day
Don't be too in a hurry
as you said, you're only 16
thanks for sharing again Val

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aaron woodside
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9 posted 2001-09-29 12:45 PM


I like this ALOT. Lately it seems I'm in the same place as you.  Looking, waiting, and wishing...  Very cool write Look forward to more from ya.

Ex Animo,
      Aaron

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