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layla
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since 2000-11-19
Posts 74


0 posted 2001-09-06 10:23 PM



You love me?
ya, love me enough to call
I wanna see if what you say to me is real
You swear thats how you feel
But you know how to intimidate
For gods sake
you FRUSTRATE
Dont tell me to open up my heart
When I'm ready I will
Dont tell me you loved me from the start
Im not mentally ill
I understand
or maybe I dont
maybe i cant
all my life I've dealt with boys never a man
Oh god you're a man
You're the man that I need
The man who I love in all of my dreams
But...
This confusion is building and its killing me
Dont tell me not to hurt you
Thats not a thing I am capable of
IF you're not true I'll forget you
IF you are, you'll have my love
I've never felt like this
ITs like a dream, this romance
If you ever hurt me
I Swear you'll loose the chance

© Copyright 2001 layla - All Rights Reserved
HopelessRomanticGuy
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since 2001-08-17
Posts 495
LI, New York
1 posted 2001-09-06 10:42 PM


This was really Good!  He loves you!  He loves you not.  It's that kind of confusion right?  You can't be forced along, ya just have to go at yer own pace.  I hope he never hurts ya.  I liked this poem alot, it reminds me of my friend's relatonship, for whatever reason.  I hope that other members like it too!

                                                                                                      Rich

Love will come and love will go, but friends are forever (usually).

cherish
Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........
2 posted 2001-09-07 01:23 AM


OOH! Raw emotion at work here!! enjoyed this one heaps, you did a very good job of telling your thoughts. thanks for sharing!

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anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797
Limbo
3 posted 2001-09-07 12:00 PM


There's nothing like laying down the law and you did that well in this piece. Got everything across very clearly and I hope that this guy treats you right.  

~AF~

"Kelly's my Hero!" "No, Kelly's your heroine." "Kelly has heroin??" "What?"

Spice
Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.
4 posted 2001-09-08 02:23 AM


Yep..Very blunt and layed out here. I liked that. I don't think I've seen a post from you, So I'll be on the look out...Hope to see more. Thanks for the read.  

You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did.

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