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Isabel Galaxia
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0 posted 2001-09-06 09:46 PM



Age make no difference to them
Shunned by society
One's loss is another's gain
A battle of morals and ethics
While desperately wanting
Yearning to please
Gains little inspiration
Those who call themselves artists
Skinny, skimpy, oh so innocent
One's trash is another's treasure
Holding such morals
Rare in the world today
Apologizing all the while
Must be her fault
They don't care
Not something they value
Rid themselves of innocence
Implications to do the same
Torn inside
Deer in headlights
No way to go
Caught up in the moment
The clothes that are worn
Those that aren't
Leaving to imagination
Not a concept anymore
Dazzling waifs
Hollywood pictures in their mind
Look at reality
Wonder why
Hint, brag, lie
Pout, sigh, plead
Do what they do
To get what they get
And be rejected
To be taken now
Would leave me forever broken


-I'm interested to hear your interpretations. Thanks
Bel

© Copyright 2001 Isabel Galaxia - All Rights Reserved
CLBinLOVE
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since 2000-06-04
Posts 147
Hilton Head, SC, USA
1 posted 2001-09-06 09:49 PM


first of all
*CONFUSED*
now that i got htat outta the way, lemmie take a shot (and miss) at this...
artists, it is like homeless people like makin art outta trash and stuff??
or maybe something alot deeper thats jus what i got outta it
*shrugs*

"as below so above and beyond i imagine
drawn beyond the lines of reason
push the envelope, watch it bend"
--Tool

Isabel Galaxia
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2 posted 2001-09-06 09:54 PM


No you're extremely off.
HAHAHAH!!!!
Bel

CLBinLOVE
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since 2000-06-04
Posts 147
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3 posted 2001-09-06 09:58 PM


*throws hand up again*
Ohh Ohh i got it ogot it!!
hehe
might the topic maybe jus possibly be sex?
i mean, it does fit anywa, better than my last guess did...
if im right, im very impressed, well i am anyway but like...ok ill shut up now

"as below so above and beyond i imagine
drawn beyond the lines of reason
push the envelope, watch it bend"
--Tool

cherish
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since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........
4 posted 2001-09-07 01:19 AM


i liked this one lots especially the "deer in the headlights" part, like saying a person is dazzeled or hypnotized by the lights of life...
my interpretation:
you're scorning fashion, or more specifically models and what they go through or what they do "Hint, brag, lie/Pout, sigh, plead" in order to get themselves to the "top" only to be pushed back away in the end when they're "rejected" cuz they've gone out of fashion themselves.
i loved these lines too:
              The clothes that are worn
              Those that aren't

i thought you did an extremely good job of this one Isabel. i liked the concept behind it -different to all the love poems we have. i enjoyed the read heaps!

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anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797
Limbo
5 posted 2001-09-07 11:57 AM


I'm going with models. You talk about "Dazzling waifs" and "Skinny, skimpy, oh so innocent" so that sort of gives it away. Another thing you could be hinting at is teenagers/aspiring models and what they will do to get on the catwalk for the limelight. The reason I say this is because of the lines, "Rid themselves of innocence" and "Hollywood pictures in their mind".

Bel, you always write these great pieces that make you think and like Cherish said, they are different to the love ones around here. You're a nice break from all that stuff. I always enjoy reading your work. Don't you EVER stop writing.  

Thanks for the read.

~AF~

"Kelly's my Hero!" "No, Kelly's your heroine." "Kelly has heroin??" "What?"

Dopey Dope
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6 posted 2001-09-22 12:01 PM


I liked this poem a lot. Well done on this one. Hope to see more.  

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

Acies
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7 posted 2001-10-06 12:14 PM


I believe the poem is about girls that put out thinking they'll get what they want because of it.  It's a hard lesson to learn, but that's a path they choose to take.  Excellent read Isabel.  Nice to see you sharing again.  Hope to see more soon  

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Jesa, Ina, Allysa, Marie, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Chelsea, Baker, Leah, Jess, Kimmie

Spice
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since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.
8 posted 2001-10-20 12:36 PM


There could be MANY interpretations on this one...But I'm going with models as well...
AWESOME job her bel...LOVED it! WOW!

Every now and then I like to stick my foot in my mouth...

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