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Poet on Acid
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0 posted 2001-09-05 09:10 PM


It gets cloudy after a while
her smile reminds you of anothers smile
her eyes are just a bit more blue than the last
too many memories surface from the past
this song or that song brings them back
sad memories of the break ups attack

"It's too cold in the world...too cold to be alone..." - >¶Øʆ<

[This message has been edited by Poet on Acid (edited 09-05-2001).]

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1 posted 2001-09-05 11:31 PM


Loved the last line. Ya know, I think I have a thing with last lines...for some odd reason I'm always loving them the most...Perhaps it's the closure? The final summarizing statement? Who knows... Anyway, Thanks for the read. It was much enjoyed, as always.

You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did.

fearing-laughter
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2 posted 2001-09-08 01:31 AM


hey u haven't been on a few days so i figured i'd see if you wrote anything. i'm glad you did.  it's cool, just too damn sad.  oh well i guess.  pretty poem tho, hopefully i'll talk to u soon.
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MindlessPoet
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3 posted 2001-09-08 01:36 AM


short, but not bad    I can't personally relate though.. no one to break up with.. lol.

For now, all I can do is dream.

anonymousfemale
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4 posted 2001-09-08 03:03 AM


This poem is full of truth. Indeed smiles, faces and even songs do remind us of other people. It isn't too good at all. I personally will never view ice cream trucks the same way again.  

I liked this and thought it wasn't too bad.  
Thanks for sharing and keep posting.

~AF~

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Ina
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5 posted 2001-09-08 10:17 AM


This was very good Tony. Keep on writing
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6 posted 2001-09-08 11:15 AM


A very sad poem but I enjoyed the read immensly, keep up the good work  

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7 posted 2001-09-08 01:18 PM


realistic sad piece...enjoyed.

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Wicced_Witch
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8 posted 2001-09-08 03:06 PM


Sad, but true...Enjoyed it.  Keep up the good work.
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