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Pixie-Babe03
Member

since 2000-08-29

Posts 387
Central Maine

0 posted 2001-09-05 06:49 PM

-=I Know You=-

I thought I didn't know you,
I guess that i thought wrong.
I thought I didn't know you,
but I knew you all along.
I thought I didn't know you,
thought it was more than it seemed.
I thought I didn't know you,
but it was all i dreamed.
I thought I didn't know you,
because you changed so suddenly.
I thought I didn't know you,
thought you didn't care for me.
I thought I didn't know you,
but I knew you all along.
I thought I didn't know you,
but... I think... I thought wrong...

-=Love starts with a SMILE, grows with a KISS, and ends with a TEAR=-

Jezziekaka
Member

since 2001-08-21

Posts 58
where the trees touch the sky

1 posted 2001-09-05 08:23 PM

So did it turn out the way you wanted right?
This touches the heart!

Da kaka

be dangerous, unpredictable, and make a lot of noise!

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

2 posted 2001-09-05 10:16 PM

Hmm the flow was pretty good the whole way through...Though towards the 2nd half the rhyme scheme got a bit screwy... (Then Again Lacey was vaccuming by my ear and my wee lil mind can't take all that racket while I read.

) The last line could flow a bit easier if it said "but I think that I thought wrong..."
Great last line either way though. It concludes the poem very well.
Glad to see a post from you!

I enjoyed it bunches!

You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did.

Pixie-Babe03
Member

since 2000-08-29

Posts 387
Central Maine

3 posted 2001-09-06 06:27 PM

Jezzie... well.. .it didn't entirely turn out the way i wanted it to, but it still may... actually the situation to put it bluntly sucks... but it just turned out that i knew what the person was thinking better then i thought i did... but i guess only time will tell thanks for the replies!

*Pixie*

-=Love starts with a SMILE, grows with a KISS, and ends with a TEAR=-

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

4 posted 2001-09-17 06:58 PM

hey Justine, nice to see you in here again
I do hope this is the start of you sharing more poems again
*crosses fingers*

I like the flow of the poem, the repetitions contributed more to it too
never lost your touch, thanks for sharing
keep it up

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Allysa, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Ma

Alyssa

Member

since 2001-05-30

Posts 385
IM ENGAGED!!!!!

5 posted 2001-09-17 09:01 PM

i really enjoyed this poem!

"Its a great day tobe alive, I know the suns still shinin when I close my eyes!"
Travis Tritt

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