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Allysa

Senior Member

since 1999-11-09

Posts 1952
In an upside-down garden

0 posted 2001-09-05 04:50 PM

I used to be able to
c
a
l
l
you whenever I needed to
t
a
l
k
Whenever I needed someone to
l
i
s
t
e
n
Whenever I felt there was no reason to
l
i
v
e
I might have found another one to
c
a
l
l
Someone who might listen and
t
a
l
k
Whenever someone is needed to
l
i
s
t
Someone to help me find out how to
l
i
v
e.

I just feel bizarre right now.

(heaven doesn't want me and hell's affraid I'll take over)

Sugarpie313 married my poem! (that's my poem, not your poem! pooh!)

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

1 posted 2001-09-05 06:00 PM

HeHe, Bizarre indeed. Loved the style. And I noticed how you used the same words...liked that. Thanks for the read!

You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did.

keoni
Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 850
Up in the mountains in the NFC

2 posted 2001-09-05 06:54 PM

Definately different for you. But I liked it. It was simple but still had alot of meaning.
Jon

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine
"Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur

Acies

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

3 posted 2001-09-15 12:19 PM

Very original Allysa
not bad, not bad at all
lol

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Allysa, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Ma

punkrockerrobin

Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 1180
Sparks, NV

4 posted 2001-09-15 06:09 AM

good poem. i liked it. keep up the good work!
robin

anonymousfemale
Member Elite

since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

5 posted 2001-09-15 01:20 PM

I don't like from you Allysa. Quite frankly, I think you are capable of much stronger writing and the format really didn't sit well. Mind you, the thought was there and that always counts for something.

Thanks for posting.

~AF~

"Kelly's my Hero!" "No, Kelly's your heroine." "Kelly has heroin??" "What?"

lil_pwheeler
Junior Member

since 2001-07-14

Posts 39
here

6 posted 2001-09-15 04:51 PM

Loved the style
Buitiful poem.
Pat

No one dies a virgin, life screws us all

Dopey Dope

Moderator

Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

7 posted 2001-09-21 04:16 PM

I did enjoy the formatting of the poem. I felt this one hard. Well done.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

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