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the_rescue
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0 posted 2001-09-05 04:35 PM



What makes the rainy days seem so bright
what can lite up the darkest of night
what could make it all worth while
can turn sorrow into a smile
Just you

Who can make my day, when nothings right
who helps give me strength when I can no longer fight
who can just smile and turn my world upside down
who else would allow me to act like such a clown
Just you

how is it that you effect me so
how can even your softest words make me grow
how is it that you make me want to be more
without ever knowing what is in store...
Just you?
Ok peeps its cheezy but often times so is love, anyways peace out....

we fall like the stars then rise like the sun..Repentence.Forgiveness.We are blame worthy hold us to our wrongs..but don't hold our wrongs against us

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keoni
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1 posted 2001-09-05 07:02 PM


This was nice. When you feel like this, everything in the world is perfect. I miss that.Good poem
Jon

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Shygirl82
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2 posted 2001-09-10 12:28 PM


This one is a keeper...i am feeling it...Great write!!
~Nikki~

Smile!!  You never know who may be falling in love with it...

cherish
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swimming in fairy floss...........
3 posted 2001-09-10 03:29 AM


this one was quite nice...it had a nice flow to it. very well done on this one. hope to read more from you soon!

"Somehow I managed to single handedly betray myself" Javier Agosto

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4 posted 2001-09-10 08:00 AM


Isnt it weird how one person can just make everything appear in a different light?? You definately expressed that well in this poem...
anonymousfemale
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5 posted 2001-09-10 12:16 PM


Lovely piece of writing. Love does do these things to us. I hope you have this feeling and this person for a long time.

Thanks for the read.  

~AF~

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6 posted 2001-09-11 02:28 AM


jimmy why don't you email me anymore i miss you! i really liked your poem.
robin

Things I Have Learned I've learned that you cannot make someone love you. All you can do is stalk them and hope they panic and give in

the_rescue
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7 posted 2001-09-11 01:43 PM


Robin sorry I'm never online anymore and when I am it's usually to post something stupid or check my schedule for playing drums so anyways I'll talk to you later.
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8 posted 2001-09-12 01:25 AM


it's alright hun. i just wish you would email me so i know you are ok.
robin

Things I Have Learned I've learned that you cannot make someone love you. All you can do is stalk them and hope they panic and give in

Spice
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Resting in my cardboard box.
9 posted 2001-09-16 03:05 AM


HeHe, This reminded me of one of the lil poems I used to read out of my Precious Moments book thingy...Except it was like
"Who turns on the bedroom light so I can go out and play?
My daddy does.
But who turns on the sun?"
Etc etc...and in the end it's God, of course...
ANYWAY...HeHeHe...
I liked how you ended the last "Just you" with a question mark. Nice touch. Nice write...Not cheesy at all!

United we stand, Divided we fall.
Never say die.

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