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Android 17

Senior Member

since 2001-07-21

Posts 664
Winnipeg

0 posted 2001-09-04 03:36 PM

This is one of my darkest poems. This is the effect of my life getting more messed up then it is! Read on, if you please!

The Course of Time-

As I stare into the Pool of Tomorrow,
I see my destructive destiny...
No matter how much I fight,
I can't forsake the course of time.

The world I wish to acquire is not in my grasp,
All my hopes and dreams...
I watch them exhiled to the land of the unknown.
I can't forsake the course of time.

The fight I lead, is filled with pain and sorrow,
For I know my happiness was never meant to be...
And I knew from the very beginning, that I was right...
I can't forsake the course of time.

I am slain, and it is too much to grasp,
As the sound of sorrow is drowned by my screams...
I lay in a puddle of failure, and I should've known...
I can't forsake the course of time...

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Thanks for your time!

~ Alex

SunShine913

Member

since 2001-08-19

Posts 211
Italy but from NC

1 posted 2001-09-04 04:51 PM

I really really liked this one.. everyone need to be happy tho... and of course everyone at pip HAS to be happy... hehe well if you need to talk im here...ok well email me if you need or want to talk about ANYTHING lovinbeinnlove@aol.com

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Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

2 posted 2001-09-04 10:34 PM

Nice use of repetition...Last Stanza was my fav.

You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did.

cherish
Senior Member

since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

3 posted 2001-09-04 11:27 PM

I am slain, and it is too much to grasp,
                               As the sound of sorrow is drowned by my screams...
                               I lay in a puddle of failure, and I should've known...
                               I can't forsake the course of time...

EYE...this is a rather dark one...but its true ive felt like a failure many many many times but the voice in my head is really good to me these days and i hate to see you feeling like this alex. youre emotions ran brilliantly through this one- it was very bleak and i thought it reflected your feelings very well. good job of this one too alex!

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anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

4 posted 2001-09-04 11:31 PM

quite realistic...

"And I knew from the very beginning, that I was right...
I can't forsake the course of time."

nicely done here...enjoyed.

if i die before i wake...i pray the Lord my soul to take - when thugs cry-

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