Teen Poetry #5 |
Nedaj |
punkyfreak New Member
since 2001-08-28
Posts 6 |
I never asked you to leave You never said where you'd go You never said anything to me So how was I suppose to know? You listened to everyone's hearsay But never once asked me anything I called at first a few times a day Until I figured out your call would never come I felt abandoned I felt so stupid I couldn't believe you would But in the end you did |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Sad poem! This is one that I can relate to! Good work! ~ Alex |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Punkyfreak! I liked this one BUNCHES! Though you started with a bit of rhyme sceme and then let it fade away... Anyway, I like what you are syaing in the poem...I can relate in ways. Thanks for the read. You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did. |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
I felt abandoned I felt so stupid oh i liked this one a lot. the way you wrote it reflected the emotions within this. the spaces made this one feel so bare and empty and in a way really quiet. im assuming that this is directed to nedaj- i hope you're feeling fine now though..just a little thing which i found amusing- nedaj is jaden backwards- cool huh? S |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
I really liked this..and I've been there so I really connected with it. feel speshul, this is the first poem I've connected with in a while...being the first poem I've read in awhile and all. but I really liked it..short and sweet keep it up! I am woman, here me roar...MEOW! |
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