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peachesNcream
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since 2001-08-21
Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

0 posted 2001-09-02 11:52 PM


I am daring,
I take chances,
Let me do as I please,
I wanna break free,
My life is full of changes,
And I am changing with them,
Please don't be afraid,
your little girl will always be here,
but treat me like the young lady that I am.

© Copyright 2001 Jessica Dodson - All Rights Reserved
Spice
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since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.
1 posted 2001-09-03 02:26 AM


2nd poem of yours I've read that talked about wanting to be treated like a lady instead of a child.
Stressful, I know. BEing a teen...you're just in that ackward stage of feeling like an adult but still not exactly BEING one yet...PArentd have a rough time with that. Perhaps you should just tell your Father/Mother what you're feeling and what you want to be treated like.
"My life is full of changes,
And I am changing with them, "
Nice write here.  

You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did.

Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico
2 posted 2001-09-03 03:17 AM


I did like this poem, but I hope you're asking your parents for independence and at the same time responsible enough to handle it. Good luck with that.  

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

Spine Grinder
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since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...
3 posted 2001-09-05 07:35 PM


jess, i liked this but i thought u should extend it more and write about more, cuz i know exactly how u  feel, and not just cuz u've told me but b/c i'm going thro it 2..neways, awesome job, cant wait 2 c more!

~death is certain, life is not~
~How can we be friends if everytime I look at you I know thats all we'll ever be~

Delirious_Smurf
Member
since 2001-08-08
Posts 90
Nothingness,P.R.
4 posted 2001-09-05 07:46 PM


Perfet poem to read..Grr I was just fighting with my motha....  

but def a great poem...I can def. relate

Who you are and who you will be is right in the palm of your hand.

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