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peachesNcream
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Ocean Of Tears

0 posted 2001-09-02 11:49 PM


Why, God, did you put me on this Earth,
I have no worth,
I don't deserve to be here,
Would it really matter if I wasn't here,
No one would notice,
Or at least care,
The window is two feet away,
Should I or would I?

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Spice
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1 posted 2001-09-03 02:20 AM


No, you shouldnt.
I oughta pop you one for thinking you don't deserve to be on this Earth. Geesh. I know whatever you are going through is tearing you apart, but sweetie...It HAS to get better. E-mail if ya need someone to talk to. You did a really great job on expressing you feelings and thoughts. Free Verse are my favorite. Hope all gets better. Keep that chin up.

You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did.

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2 posted 2001-09-03 03:18 AM


We all have our place, it just takes some time to find it. Be patient. Well done on the poem.  

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

Angelwings
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3 posted 2001-09-03 02:23 PM


Wow Peaches!  It won't be bad forever.  Focus on the making the future better than the stuff you are going through now.  I am great at listening and I wouldn't mind hearing about it.  You can e-mail at Silvertone711@aol.com.  Sorry life isn't seeming very good but it will get better I PROMISE!  Good poem.

If we're told we're bad, that's the only idea we'll ever have. Maybe if we are surrounded by beauty someday we will become what we see.

SunShine913
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4 posted 2001-09-03 04:48 PM


HEY dont think like that .. but i like the peom it was said but DONT DO IT .. if you need to talk im here... just like Angelwings said im here to listen if you need me

                    !~Andrea~!
*You only live once, so live it to the
fullest*
*what is love?*

~*brittt*~
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5 posted 2001-09-05 09:31 AM


No no no..... you shouldn't. This poem is so sad and you expressed yourself very well, but try to see the bright side of things. It sounds like you're lonely, and you feel like no one cares and would notice if you were gone... but you're wrong. Keep your head up hun and it'll get better
~britt~

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6 posted 2001-09-05 01:53 PM


Ack...no you shouldn't is right! Everyone has a place (Dopey is correct this time   )
I hope you get over such negative thinking, just rembember there's always another day, another chance. Nice work here.

Jenn

"...and this is how you remind me, of what I really am..."

Spine Grinder
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Standing In Silence...
7 posted 2001-09-05 07:39 PM


OMG! no jess! no no no! abosultely noT!

~death is certain, life is not~
~How can we be friends if everytime I look at you I know thats all we'll ever be~

lilibeelee
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8 posted 2001-09-16 08:03 PM


Great job! i can relate!
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9 posted 2001-09-16 08:13 PM


Hey! Id miss you, cuz i havent even got to know you yet! Id miss out and that wouldnt be fair!
Good poem, expresses and gets to the point quite well!

Do you believe in love at first sight? If not I can walk by again!
----ya...right---

anonymousfemale
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10 posted 2001-09-17 03:41 AM


*sigh* *hugs*

everyone has these thoughts but to do something before you find an answer that is even logical wouldn't be too good. You need to understand that life throws us many curve balls. The way to handle them is which way you hold the bat. Get me?

Take care of yourself and keep writing.

~AF~

"Who needs enemies,
When you've got friends like these
Caught between me and myself again"
Motor Ace - Enemies

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11 posted 2001-09-17 12:32 PM


It's already been said, but we all have our place in this world. It's upto you to find it...it might not seem like much, but it means alot. It's upto you to find it! Don't give up hope!

"If you beleive with your whole heart, you will succeed!"

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12 posted 2001-09-17 02:03 PM


no u definately SHOULDNT!

I understand where your coming from but reguardless of how you feel you ARE needed...you may not know why you were put here but who really does ya kno?? Take it one day at a time ::hugs::

Chel
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13 posted 2001-09-17 06:02 PM


Hey there,
It seems as though you have friends here and no one wants to see you get hurt.  I definitely wouldn't pass them up.  Great piece of writing, keep your head up.

Chel

"True friends stab you in the front."
"You are special and unique in your own way." "Your FAITH is all you need"

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