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peachesNcream
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Ocean Of Tears

0 posted 2001-09-02 11:40 PM


Treat me as the young lady you see,
not the little girl of the past,
she has grown up,
look at what she has become,
have you raised a fine young woman?
Some may think so,
but do you?
I'm not a little girl anymore, daddy,
I've grown up.
Don't yell at me, please.
I've tried not to make you mad.
I'm sorry,
if I'm not the young lady you wish I would have become.

                                    

© Copyright 2001 Jessica Dodson - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-09-06 10:46 PM


Hmm...nice poem! I like it!

PeachesNcream? Do you have an MSN account like that? It sounds familiar...

Anyway, this was good work!

There's no point in living, if you can't feel alive!

anonymousfemale
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2 posted 2001-09-07 11:28 AM


We often seem to disappoint the people that shape our lives but do you know what? In the end, your own happiness is important as well as others. Do you feel happy with what you have become? If the answer is yes then your father will adapt to who you are. If the answer is no, ask yourself why?

The piece is heartfelt and quite sincere. If you ever need to talk, my email is: shadowchaser46@hotmail.com.

Keep your head up and keep writing.  

~AF~

"Kelly's my Hero!" "No, Kelly's your heroine." "Kelly has heroin??" "What?"

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3 posted 2001-09-21 04:10 PM


Well done here. You expressed your sentiments quite well. I hope your right of freedom does come to you soon, but along with that comes responsibility.....good luck.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

Spine Grinder
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4 posted 2001-09-22 10:26 AM


wow, jess , this is good, thanks 4 da read!

Did u ever have the feeling that he meant everything 2 u, yet u meant nothing 2 him?.....

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5 posted 2001-10-06 12:11 PM


I do hope you solve your differences with your dad.
thanks for the read

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6 posted 2001-10-06 12:22 PM


Aawww! I totally understand where you're coming from... I don't know what to say... awesome read, you put into words what so many of us feel.

Maybe in order to understand mankind, we have to look at the word itself: "Mankind". Basically, it's made up of two separate words - "mank" and "ind".

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