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MissKittie
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since 2001-08-31
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0 posted 2001-08-31 07:17 AM


Star bright,
guiding light,
lead me through
this sleepless night.

Past all the pain,
through all the strife,
far from this nightmare,
this thing we call life.

Lead me somewhere
that could be a dream,
where I could be special,
like a princess or queen.

A place with a river of hope,
and an ocean of love,
where you can see all your wishes come true
in the sky up above.

Star bright,
guiding light,
lead me through
this sleepless night.

Kristi Lynn


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keoni
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since 2000-10-16
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1 posted 2001-08-31 10:32 AM


Welcome to Passions. Nice first post. I know those nights where all you can think about is getting away. Hope you like it here.
Jon

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2 posted 2001-08-31 12:04 PM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!  I am sure you will enjoy yourself here.  This was a wonderful first post, and I cant wait to see more from you.  By the way, check your email for a PiPSurprise!

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3 posted 2001-08-31 01:32 PM


Well done here! Welcome to Passions! I surely did enjoy the poem and think you will make a lot of great poetic contributions to the site. I really liked this one and hope to see more.  

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

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Spice
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4 posted 2001-09-01 06:48 PM


   WELCOME TO PIP!  

A great first write! I loved how you began and ended with the same stanza, it made for some awesome closure to the poem. The flow was done wonderfully as well, the rhyme scheme helped alot in that area. Anyway, hope to see much more posts AND replies from you in the near future. Thanks for the read.  

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5 posted 2001-09-02 11:56 AM


Welcome!   I liked the rhyme of this, nicely done  

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Ina
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since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada
6 posted 2001-09-02 01:39 PM


Welcome to passions! this was a very good first post. hope to see you post and reply lots around here.

Regina

TopGunLauren
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California
7 posted 2001-09-02 06:57 PM


Very good first post I loved it keep up the awsome work!
  Lauren

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